| "Cross Between Times" Reviews/Comments [ 32 ] |
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Title: Cross Between Times
Reviewed By: Megan Consoer On: November 04, 2004 01:51 CST
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I really like this story alot. Can you write some more chapters?
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Reviewed By: MichiruAOZ [MediaMiner Member] On: October 21, 2004 03:14 CDT
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Well it definently show promise but please update soon!!! Good luck and can't wait!
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Reviewed By: InuKitsuneMiko [MediaMiner Member] On: October 19, 2004 19:31 CDT
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nice. I like it! ^_^ please update soon.
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Reviewed By: mysterylady_tx [MediaMiner Member] On: October 19, 2004 07:01 CDT
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AWE man you can't just END IT THERE!!! I mean come on have a heart...that was just an EVIL EVIL place to end it...she just blasted Heie...that's already a start to a wonderful relation ship...hehehehe...>:) EVIL!! Thanks...can't wait for the Next part and see what Heie will do to Yuske for laughing at him being thrown by a petit young woman:D
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Reviewed By: mysterylady_tx [MediaMiner Member] On: October 19, 2004 06:48 CDT
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SWEET!!! ok so she's met Yuske...and I hope that's heie she's sensing...very intersting
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Reviewed By: mysterylady_tx [MediaMiner Member] On: October 19, 2004 06:40 CDT
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oh that was interesting....
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Reviewed By: Deja Voodoo On: October 18, 2004 19:30 CDT
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Hallo! I thought I'd offer a bit of friendly, constructive criticism. I couldn't help but notice that in Chapter 1, Kagome finds a note saying that her family will be gone for a few weeks, but in Chapter 2, her mother wakes her up for breakfast the next morning. She also introduces herself to the class twice in Chapter 2. A lot of the plot so far is similar to other fics I've read, but you've still got plenty of room left for original plot devices, which I hope to see! I like that you didn't make Kikyou and Inuyasha plot for Kagome's death, as I've seen sooooo many times. I really don't have much to add that others haven't already said. Don't let flamers discourage you. All fanfics are works in progress, and it's constructive criticism that allows you to improve as a writer. We all have room for improvement. As for whether there should be a lemon...I'm always inclined to answer that question positively, but really, you should let the plot decide for you. Don't stick in a lemon where it wouldn't naturally work, and don't leave one out where it really calls for one. Does that make sense? Just follow the plot and the characters; they'll let you know what to do.
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Reviewed By: inuyuyurrk [MediaMiner Member] On: September 05, 2004 21:13 CDT
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Its a good start. There are some grammer errors and I noticed a few sections missing.. that I have leard is something that happens when you put the story on M.M though. It was easy enough to figure out though. I like and hope to read more soon!
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Reviewed By: flygirl 13 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 04, 2004 22:30 CDT
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this is a great fic so far plz update soon
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Reviewed By: whiteguineapig25 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 04, 2004 02:07 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 3 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
a pretty good story so far but the author needs more practice at writing
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Reviewed By: You Suck On: August 26, 2004 19:01 CDT
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Apparently you suck at fan fics too.
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Reviewed By: You Suck On: August 26, 2004 18:58 CDT
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Apparently you suck at fan fics to.
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Reviewed By: kagome15 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 26, 2004 07:46 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
great story!!! update soon please ^_^
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Title: here ya go!
Reviewed By: toasterwoman360 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 25, 2004 10:01 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
here's the review you asked for! well, you could improve the grammar a little, you're missing some punctuation and capatilaztion. And Kaede's name ends with "e" not and "a". I didn't give it a creativity rating because not much has really happened yet for me to base that on. Otherwise it was pretty good so far, so upadte soon. I want to know what happens next! ^_^
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