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Title: You Have Been Reviewed
Reviewed By: You Have Been Reviewed [MediaMiner Member] On: January 03, 2006 03:47 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I actually had to read this one through a couple of times to pick out the technical problems with the story. This tale is chilling, gripping, and difficult to draw away from, much like the "Him" the narrator refers to in the story. As both an artist and writer, I had an immediate sense of familiarity with online community scenes such as the narrator speaks of, and the eerie similarity to reality heightens the feel of this story. The only real structural problems this story has are comma use (or rather, lack thereof this time) and some shadows of the tense-switching habit that Fanilia had in Spirit Seeker. Other grammar problems were isolated and did not really detract at all from the quality of writing. Were the fictions of those literary minds; greats of their times, dealing with a single subject-the darkness of men's fear-really fictitious? The semi-colon here is out of place; since the first part of that sentence cannot stand alone, and the second part is broken by dashes, it doesn't work. This would be better broken down in to a more complex but more cohesive structure: "Were the fictions of those literary minds - greats of their times, dealing with a single subject: the darkness of men's fear - really fictitious?" This separates the description of those literary minds from the rest of the sentence: "Were the fictions of those literary minds really fictitious?" Find the full review here: http://www.livejournal.com/users/uvebeenreviewed/1473.html
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Title: Amazing
Reviewed By: futekioosha [MediaMiner Member] On: May 27, 2005 01:32 EDT
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Wow fan, this was just fantastic...I was so drawn into this tale that I felt the fear of the author. You write really well. While this is the first of your writings I've read, it will not be the last. You have an awesome gift. Thank you for sharing.
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Title: nailbiting
Reviewed By: newkid [MediaMiner Member] On: May 23, 2005 12:47 EDT
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excellente... or awesomely done... um.. can i put your story on another site? i wanna show ppl that there are good story written by reg. ppl in english too... cuz that site is not in english... but i like to ask for your permission to post it there... and of course... the credits will be giving to you... cuz you're the author of an incredible piece of work... love it... let me know...
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Title: nice!
Reviewed By: dje On: April 13, 2005 00:58 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
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very good. it got me reading 'till the end. very few writers can do that... hah! although i had some ideas running when the draft was opened, your description made me just want to read on. good luck on your future works!
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Reviewed By: nhamot [MediaMiner Member] On: April 08, 2005 19:27 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
um... i didn't even finish the first chapter before i wrote this... i complement you on the suspense factor. halfway through the chapter my heart was already beating like crazy!!!
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Reviewed By: Shadow-sama On: March 24, 2005 20:49 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
well, that really didn't scare me but its really hard to freak me out by words ^^;; but i love the story, such a unusual way to go about writing it.
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Reviewed By: Drof On: March 06, 2005 18:27 EST
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WOW!!! Coolies!!! You right really good, Fanilia!!! This is AWESOME!!!
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Title: Scared the living ghost outta me
Reviewed By: devildice708 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 26, 2005 19:35 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Now that's scary.That scared the living ghost outta me, and outta my shoes and outta my socks. That's got me running to grab my blankie...not like I have one... but if I did I would get it and hide under it in a fetal position telling myself that it isn't real--its that scary. Seriously, I hope you write a whole lot more like these. Peace!
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Reviewed By: Dumas1 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 01, 2005 02:47 EST
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You already know what I think of this piece. It's very scary in more or less the same way Lovecraft is scary: one very small thing is wrong, but that one thing is enough to bring someone's world down.
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Title: Wow.
Reviewed By: Sueric [MediaMiner Member] On: February 01, 2005 02:35 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Sitting here trying to find adequate words to describe this oneshot is difficult. It's very powerful, very moving, and very beautiful in its dark feel. The evocative feel is absolutely wonderful; I truly enjoyed this 'dream'! Brilliantly done! Thanks for sharing it with us!
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Title: Wow
Reviewed By: Mileniua [MediaMiner Member] On: January 08, 2005 15:53 EST
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OMG that was scary. Not in an actual movielike scary, but one that would haunt you just because you feel what the author is supposidly going through. The kind of thing that would scare the hell out of you just by your our immagination. Very good. Very scary. Haunting...
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Title: Whoa!
Reviewed By: Brian (aka DigiRanma) On: September 01, 2004 00:09 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
There are fanfics that make you think, that haunt you, and make you go "Whoa!" This does all three. Great job.
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Title: *hides under blankets*
Reviewed By: Snoopy708 On: August 31, 2004 21:33 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I dont think i like horror fiction anymore, way to scary. But it was really well written, scared the shit out of me. I swear now if anyone tell me Sweet Dreams, i will scream. I am not going to be able to sleep today until at least 4. I am not going to be able to click on a link now without fearing for my sanity. I know im not much of a reviewer- but just wanted to say that i really enjoyed your fic even if now i am scarred. Though thanks for the scare!
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Reviewed By: pardusardens [MediaMiner Member] On: August 31, 2004 14:05 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Woah, sweet. Finally, someone's written a good Lovecraft reference! Although a few of his works have been drawn upon so heavily that they don't have much to them anymore (like The Stranger, I think it was), a few are still awesomely powerful (The Rats in the Walls, for example, or The Color Out Of Space). As for this interpretation, I like the modernized spin you put on it. There WERE a few places, though, where I think you got a little caught up in the Lovecraft-y language and got carried away with the musings. There's one line... "One night he grew particularly quiet, if quiet is a term applied to written text transferred from one cold machine to another" line, for example, where a good two thirds of it, to ME at least, distracts more than it adds. There's a few other places where the same thing happens. Hmm... other than that, I kinda like how it turned into a social commentary for a bit--although I thought it maybe dragged out a bit too long--and the ending was good. Almost like the ending of The Rats in the Walls, one of my all-time favorites. I think you've got a GREAT start toward Lovecraft's style, although you might want to let go of some of the details. The greatness of Lovecraft was that he let the reader fill in the terrible sights with his or her own shadows, as it were. All in all, it's really good! And I'm glad to see someone else is a raving Lovecraft fan! Keep up the good work!
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Reviewed By: Lady Macbeth [MediaMiner Member] On: August 26, 2004 20:04 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a very fun read - thrilling and exciting all the way through. No gripes on the spelling & grammar (wonder why ~_^) and I totally enjoy the classic style of writing you have. Kudos on a top-rate original short story! :D
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