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| "Hearts & Minds" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Reviewed By: Dee-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: October 24, 2004 22:05 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
It all started at the end it seemed. What a spectacular way to start a story! Such a paradox drew me in quickly!...GAH It's late, will r&r the rest of chp1 later ERRORS: Possessive nouns (P1,L2 SHINJIS=Shinji's, there were more) spelling (P8,L3 recognise=recognize), direct address punctuation (Misato P13, L1), missing words&contractions (P17, L1 Its good to see you well Shinji=IT'S good to see you AS well, Shinji.) Probably more; too lazy to list
| Reviewed By: dennisud [MediaMiner Member] On: September 03, 2004 20:24 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Other than some glaring Grammatical problems, This was a throughly enjoyable story. A good bit of action, drama, humor and romance that kept me wanting to finish the story even as it became such a long read. I suggest publishing on FFN (www.fanfiction.net) by publishing each section of the chapters separately! You will get more of an audiance there an lots more reviews! Great read and hopefully much more to come! dennisud P.S.- Hope my e-mail with some corrections got to you!
| Title: EXCELLENT!
Reviewed By: Ravenz2008 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 30, 2004 14:02 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very well written story. I'm impressed with the level of plot and character development. Excellent work. I've only read the first 2 chapters so far but I *will* continue to read the rest. =P ~Raven
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