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| "Battle Joined" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Title: Awesome
Reviewed By: ThePD [MediaMiner Member] On: June 30, 2005 14:04 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Awesome fic. I have never even heard of this series, but the fic itself is incredible. Good job on the Present Tense thing, its hard to make it work.
| Title: FFARG
Reviewed By: Broken Visage [MediaMiner Member] On: March 13, 2005 12:48 CST
Comment/Review:
Incredibly well done, both with the POV and tense. Rarely are present tense stories seen (I've only seen one actually published) probably due to people's inability to make them work, but you made it work fantastically. Also, the POV adds so much more to the action, enabling the psychological part of it to have a greater impact than it would in third-person. The action itself is well-written and detailed. I'm trying to find things that need improvement but there is a measure of difficulty with that. There seem to be a couple of sentence fragments but I'm sure those were intentional seeing as how they fit in perfectly and keep the flow. In any case, excellent work, especially with the use of present tense.
| Title: Impressive!
Reviewed By: Sueric [MediaMiner Member] On: February 04, 2005 11:06 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Okay, so first off, I'll say, I am not familiar with this series. That said, I thoroughly enjoyed this oneshot, even without prior knowlege. The action flowed well, the internal thoughts were cohesive and very well formed. I enjoyed the description of the battle, and the entire process of trying to figure out the enemy's weakness and his analysis of the entire venue. While I normally don't like first person or present tense, it works great here. Because of the battle scenario, the present tense adds a dimension of anxiety to the overall feel, and that is something hard to accomplish. Kudos to you! Thanks for sharing!
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