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Title: Beautiful ::fans herself::
Reviewed By: YoukaiMusashi [MediaMiner Member] On: January 31, 2005 08:52 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Gosh! Your 'lemonade' was far better than many lemons I have read...this WAS IC, even if you don't seem to think so...::fans herself again:: Man you're evil ;) But this was Right and hot and Very intense, and in my humble opinion, it wouldn't really have been right at this point if they mated Now...even if I want them to lol. But man I CAN'T WAIT lol...hentai me...but this was such sweet HOT lemonade! Want more! It was wonderful that they did not rush things in this particular ch, although like Miroku put it wisely "Inuyasha definetely needs to get some" lol. Loved it loved it loved it!!! Again, bravo, amazing job, incredible sexual tension...incredibly heated chap...gosh! AGAIN, GREAT JOB GIRL! Man this fic ROCKS! Lifetime supply of ramen and pocky for you! YM
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Title: Kisses, Sexual Tension, And Chosen Ones, Oh My
Reviewed By: Youkai Musashi (again not signed in...) [MediaMiner Member] On: January 30, 2005 15:25 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Baka me, I realized I didn't put an overall rating in my last review! So here it is: 10,10,10,10 and finally TEN :) Me wants more kissing and Inu-Kags fluff! Can I kill Kaede now? No wait I like the old hag...Ok, I definetely liked the Neko clan showing up here. And the Inu-Kags sexual tension is JUST beginning! Lovely lovely lovely! Did I ever mention I LOVE Kagura? Specially the Sess-Kagura pairing...please give poor Kagura a happy ending! She deserves it! And man I can't wait for next ch! Again, the characters' interaction is wonderful! Sess may be slightly OOC here, but it's AU so it doesn't count and I did say Slightly :) Plus it fits here perfectly. Not many people pay attention to Kagura...that's such a shame cause she's such an interesting, wonderful character. And I was just wondering...you mentioned Bakotsu, are u planning to add the Shichinintai here as well? I shouldn't really ask anything til I'm through reading all the chaps, so nevermind...Absolutely ADORED the kissing scene! So SWEET...and the trust growing between them is Very important so glad you wrote that! Can't wait can't wait for more! YM
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Title: Awesome!
Reviewed By: Youkai Musashi (too lazy to sign in) On: January 30, 2005 09:51 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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Hi! I couldn't catch up with my reading yesterday so today I'll read more! But I wanted to leave a review on this chap...absolutely loved it! It was so cute! Again to avoid filling a review with the bits I liked best...this is one of my favorites in this chap: Every way in which they communicated with each other was nothing short of passionate. Indeed :) I adored this! And oh dear Kikyou is there ::growls:: Poor Yasha ::cuddles Inu:: Things are just getting better and better...I have to run now but I'll email you and read the next chap when I come back :) Again, amazing work girl! Bravo! Standing ovation for this chap and the whole story thus far :) And gods it's Only the beginning! I'm so excited about this fic! You rock! Love and ramen (and pocky) YM
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Title: Third review!
Reviewed By: YoukaiMusashi [MediaMiner Member] On: January 28, 2005 07:43 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This chap was so much fun! Particularly LOVED Yasha and Kags' driving lessons :) Sooo Kouga is fast at Everything is he lol...oh dear...again the interaction with all of the characters is wonderful...and I love love Kagura! ::cuddles Kagura:: Evil Naraku...and little (not so little here) Rin is so cute, always adorable, and I went all AWWWWW when she called Sessh Sesshoumaru-dad! CUTE! This chap had it all! Though I must wonder about Kanna and Souta...hmm...that's a bit weird. But maybe it's just because Kanna freaks me out lol. I absolutely love how Yasha and Kags' relationship is growing...slowly but surely :) And the paint fight was just adorable! Also I particularly love this: 'Inuyasha was type of person who created his own first impression of a person and stuck by it. The more threatened he felt that he might be wrong, he would try that much harder to force that person into the mold he had created for them.' Very Inu-ish definetely...except for Kanna, everyone is perfectly IC in here! But it's AU so Kanna can do what she damn wants :) Let's just hope she doesn't hurt cute Souta or I'll cry ::hugs So-u-ta:: I loved that too! Just like his sis :) Again wonderful job! Can't wait to read more!!! Your loyal reader, Youkai Musashi
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Title: Second review!
Reviewed By: YoukaiMusashi [MediaMiner Member] On: January 27, 2005 07:22 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow! I absolutely totally ADORED chapter 2!!! Again, completely IC, particularly loved Miroku and Sango's interaction, and Inu and Kags' first meeting was perfect :) I considered cutting and pasting my favorites bits but realised they wouldn't fit here :P And anyway...I don't know where you'd get the idea this chapter was boring!!! Lol...and now sexy puppy hanyou smelled wolf...oh dear, I can't wait for chap 3!!! And more Inu-Kags! YAY! Me happy :) So glad I got to find this story! Thanks for sharing! I'll be back tomorrow for more! Love and ramen! Youkai Musashi
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Title: YoukaiMusashi (not signed in)
Reviewed By: YoukaiMusashi [MediaMiner Member] On: January 26, 2005 09:25 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hi! I've only read the 1st chap so far and I can't wait to read more! I don't usually read AU fics, but yours was highly praised and recommended to me and now I can see the reasons! :) You're very talented, girl, and you have This Youkai Musashi hooked! I can't wait to come back from work and read more! Amazing job! You're a great writer, and the characters ARE IC if you ask me so far :) And if at some point in the fic they're not...well it's AU, ne? :) I'm SO loving this fic! I'll leave you a review every time I finish reading a chap, I hope I can get the time to read it all in one go! But the more reviews the better, right! And I want to post my opinion on every chap, if you don't mind! Again, great job!!! I'm impressed!
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Reviewed By: renatanocis [MediaMiner Member] On: January 25, 2005 19:54 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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This chapter isn't boring! Character development is fun to read. I really like how you write Sango.
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Reviewed By: scherezade [MediaMiner Member] On: January 18, 2005 17:34 CST
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I am an abysmal, abysmal person! I throw myself at your feet for not being able to give you feedback sooner. First of all, you've made me sooooo happy! The lemon...the much anticipated lemon...finally here! Scherezade does the "happy hentai" dance :) The lemon scene had a good balance between tenderness and dominant inu - and you know, I love me some dominant inu! :) On another note, you had a great line that just made me laugh! "Kagome noted that having a boyfriend with hair longer than her own could be an advantage." Not because it's funny...but b/c it's so true! Inuyasha and Sessh must have some damn fine haircare products...would make any girl who doesn't have a pixie hairdo feel like she's died and gone to hair product heaven! Also, I thought you did a nice job with Kikyou's reflection on the Onigumo/Naraku situation. She's been showing her softer side lately...makes it a little harder to just hate her. Oh well, we can still try, ne? You already know that I think your fic is great! Good balance between action and emotion...I could definitley get some pointers from you on how to write an action scene! Well...things are coming to a head...especially because nobody seems to realize where the Shikon is yet! Cue evil music! Another fine chapter from you!
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Reviewed By: Esther Tan On: January 18, 2005 17:14 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You updated!!!! Thank you. Love yr story & wow this chapter is a feast to me as its long. I love the way you make Inuyasha like the anime still a jerk but more sensitive. Oh I hope they can rescue Kanna soon. Hope Naraku gets his dessert soon that evil noodle head!!! Like the way you make Inuyasha more decisive & hey at least your story let him tells Kagome of his love. Please update soon. Its so way exciting.
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Reviewed By: Esther Tan On: December 08, 2004 17:16 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ITS THE GREATEST STORY I'VE EVER READ (besides "The Lucky Ones"). I love the soft touch of Inuyasha. Curse Naraku & Kikyo always in the way! Arghhhhhh... please update soonest. Can't wait for Naraku to get his evil ass kicked. Gosh! hope U will update plenty soon cos' even now the suspense its killing me. Great JOB!!!
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Reviewed By: FanelianPrincess On: November 30, 2004 18:14 CST
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Thanks for the update. I read 2 new chapters today. I'm so happy! I'm looking forward to your next chapter. Y
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Reviewed By: FanelianPrincess On: November 30, 2004 18:14 CST
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Thanks for the update. I read 2 new chapters today. I'm so happy! I'm looking forward to your next chapter. Y
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Reviewed By: baka onna On: November 24, 2004 15:27 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Arrgh! I want to cry for her! Inu is such a butt! Great for building a good story though, ne? Keeps us waiting for the next chapter!
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Reviewed By: Esther Tan On: November 24, 2004 03:22 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hi, this the first time I'm reading yr story & great to say its truly amazing. I always like the pairing Inu/Kag. I hope Inu won't be an ass & he & Kagome can resolve their feelings quickly. Any fool can tell they love each other. Just take the chase , Inu & tell Kagome you wanna mate with her you baka you! Sigh ! I always get so immersed into the stories. So don't let Inu & Kag be unhappy hoping U will fix it by next chapter. But just to say I am rooting for U. Pls continue updating.
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Reviewed By: frostshake On: November 23, 2004 23:25 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh my god this is so good!! I can't believe Inuyasha said that, what an idiot. Oh well, I love your fic. Don't let the minimum number of reviews keep them from letting you update your story is awesome!!
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Reviewed By: scherezade [MediaMiner Member] On: November 23, 2004 20:51 CST
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You posted! You posted! I like some of the content changes you made compared to the version I read before... But I'm dying for the actual lemon!!! Me want more...me want more!! :)
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Reviewed By: Danziggy On: November 13, 2004 07:08 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Your writing style is without question singular. Keep up the exceptional work.
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Reviewed By: RavenShadow [MediaMiner Member] On: November 12, 2004 00:14 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a really great story. I really love is so far! This chapter was hot, that i can really say right now, except I hope you can update soon!!!!
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Reviewed By: scherezade [MediaMiner Member] On: November 11, 2004 14:28 CST
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Hey there...it's me, szmadad! I finally have a pen name now that I've posted my own story at this site. I was so excited to get an alert about your update. I just love your writing...and this is a fun story to read. It was terribly nice of you to give Kouga some sense - he's realized that he's where in the running for Kag's affections. Now Naraku's deviousness has me wondering - is he going to try to use Kikyo to break Inu and Kag up? is he going to try and make Kags think that Inu cheated on her (the way he did with Kikyo)? Now if it's the latter...we all know that Kag would doubt Inu completely...after all, that's the big difference b/w her and Kikyo; Kags trusts Inu with all her heart. Hmm...this will be interesting. Of course, you're at my favorite part - the Inu-Kag LEMON (well, you know I'd be interested in that since my own story is pretty much an all out lemon with no plot). Of course, I'm assuming that it's an Inu-Kag lemon coming up. After all, it would be terribly mean for you to give us some lemonade for them and then bust out the lemon for some other couple! Congrats on showing your dog. As for Inuyasha and his Inu heritage. An akita would make the most sense...I just looked up a picture of one to be sure, and I have to agree with you on your assessment of the ears. :) Update soon! I want the LEMON!!
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Reviewed By: Zonza [MediaMiner Member] On: October 20, 2004 16:13 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow!!! This is a really good and well written piece of fiction, I love the plot you have going on and really love how you show the relations between all of the characters. Most people only focaus on the couples and nothing between any one else other than to say that they are friends or that they are enemies... I really like what you've got going on here ~Zonza
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Reviewed By: Trusuprise [MediaMiner Member] On: September 29, 2004 07:18 CDT
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I've fixed the error, sorry about that.
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Reviewed By: erftrgwq On: September 27, 2004 16:42 CDT
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chapter 3 is the same as chapter 2 you story is very good but i was so lookin forward to the next chapter please fix asap
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Reviewed By: szmadad [MediaMiner Member] On: September 20, 2004 19:18 CDT
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Yesss...an update! Your writing is wonderful - you've got very clever descriptions and the diaogue is fun. Oh hell, I guess Kagome is who I'm getting a kick out of..she's a sassy chick, eh? .and to top it off, Inuyasha just has to swallow what she says for now. But I'm glad you're letting his natural surliness come through..after all, that's what Kagome will fall for...not some smarmy charmer. Speaking of which, please tell me that Kagome is NOT attracted to Kouga beyond "oh cute youkai"....I mean, in my twisted mind...Inu-Kag's chemisty and mutual attraction can't be beat. I'd really hate for her to trying to choose between Inu and the wolf. It's so obvious to me - hottie hanyou all the way!! I have no clue why I'm the only one reviewing your story...but people will catch on soon, I'm sure.
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Reviewed By: szmadad [MediaMiner Member] On: September 17, 2004 16:29 CDT
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Ok,,,I had to go back to reread the chapter to figure out how Kagome and Kikyo are related. Cousins, eh? Would Kagome know about the relationship b/w Inuyasha and Kikyo...being that it took place only 6 years ago? Have Kagome and Kikyo been in contact at all...I almost would've thought Naraku would've had Kikyo try to talk Kagome into listening to Naraku. Y'know the whole "get a family member to show how good the deal is" Do the youkai generally walk around freely amongst humans? Or do they all have a concealing spell of some sort? Looking forward to Inu and Kag meeting and sparks flying (I LOVE that couple)
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