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| "Neon Genesis Evangelion: Altered Destinies" Reviews/Comments [ 9 ] | Reviewed By: Saric [MediaMiner Member] On: June 11, 2007 06:47 CDT
Comment/Review:
Though you do have some mistakes were you keep referring to shinji as a boy when you made him a girl its pretty much flawless. Your idea for changing the tradional male/female relationship of shinji and rei into a female/female is very interesting. Would like to see more updates to find out where your going to go with the whole story and with the whole shinji/rei relationship.
| Title: really good
Reviewed By: chakal [MediaMiner Member] On: February 13, 2007 21:59 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
this fanfic is getting better and better i thing is going to end up being a azome story
| Reviewed By: Chaos Damn It [MediaMiner Member] On: March 24, 2006 21:11 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 4 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, to coin a phrase, I would say that all you're doing is beating a dead horse, but in your case you may have mistakenly grabbed a feather-down pillow instead of the more traditional mallet in which to issue forth with said beatings. That and the horse may have an I.V. on 'em. in case you didn't get that little rambling, I mean that while you are taking one of the most used, abused, and trampled paths of Evangelion fandom around, the rewrite, you manage not to add too many of your own footprints to the path. More like you're walking next to it, somewhere off in the grass. The reason for this assertion rests solely on your implementation of Shinji as a female character, something I myself have never seen before. This one redeeming quality was enough to score you a four for the originality, but no higher seeing as you are still doing a rewrite, leaving most of your actual story to be nothing more than a reiteration of the events of evangelion. I will say though that you write rather well. I even often found myself noticing a lot of similarities between your style of writing and my own, hence your grade of an eight for that particular category, somewhere around the same level that I would end up placing myself. Your spelling and grammar were nigh impeccable, but I did notice a few little errors that caused me to lower you from a ten, such as a particular part somewhere in the first or second chapter in which Shinji comments on the difficulty of piloting the eva twice in one sentence. Both times the exact same words were used, and of which only one of the statements is responded to by Ritsuko, even though from what I gathered both were being spoken aloud and within earshot of the doctor. As far as enjoyment factor goes, I managed to find your story entertaining enough, though the parts where you restated the already known story were boring and tiresome. And the fight scenes, while explained in a comprehensible and fluid manner, were all too short, and held almost no impact whatsoever. For the gruff of it all I render you a nine because I like the direction in which you are heading, and when this story is brought in to comparison with others of the same type, there are far fewer above you than below. I'll follow up on the next chapter or so, or maybe not even till the final installment of this little fic here. Whatever. I do, however, feel as though I have to give you a word of thanks though, cause now I feel like cranking out a rewrite of my own. Yeah I know, kinda hypocritical for how heavy-handed I was being towards it at the beginning of my review, but you can come flame me and give me a one for creativity as compensation if it so suits you. ^_^ Anyways, best of wishes to your further endeavors, and good luck with it all. - ChaosDamnIt
| Reviewed By: Marine Brother Shran [MediaMiner Member] On: March 12, 2006 22:04 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is interesting. A Shinji/Rei romance, but instead of the classic Male-Female relationship, you've turned it into a Female/Female relationship. This is rather interesting. However, I am wondering, are you going to make Rei Shinji's sister? Or will Shinji not give a shit and still consider her as her lover, instead of her sister, providing that this story is a Shinji/Rei romance fic? Anyways, this should be interesting. A full roster of female pilots lol. Anyways, that's all from me, I hope you update soon. Cheers ^^ Ja ne
| Title: nice
Reviewed By: Hikaru-RoseRed [MediaMiner Member] On: December 29, 2005 17:28 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
like most of your storys that i read wow is the least i can say. i love this one. very intresting and i think im going to keep and eye on it. in fact i know that i am so make sure you update again soon. btw i usually read everything you have then post a commment but anyway. please coninute this story!!!
| Reviewed By: The Reanimated Raynor [MediaMiner Member] On: September 22, 2005 17:06 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very nice work so far! It'll be interesting what else will end up changed from the small tweaks you've made in the beginning. Aren't Butterfly-Effect stories great? ^_^ The Reanimated Raynor
| Title: Fallen Element
Reviewed By: Kyoko Menari On: June 27, 2005 12:43 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
YAY! an update! thank you,thank you,thank you! i was hoping and praying that you would keep with this sorry and you did. i love all your storys and i cant wait to see more updates for angel's gift and the eva fic.
| Title: Fallen Element
Reviewed By: Kyoko Menari On: June 10, 2005 14:13 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I realy like this story but it seems to be on a back burner, do you think you can update a bit more im very interested to see were your going to take this story( and what rei will be to shin-chan) till next time. Kyoko.
| Reviewed By: redshadow On: September 28, 2004 16:55 CDT
Comment/Review:
interesting...i'll keep an eye on this one
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