Reviewed By: Broken Visage [MediaMiner Member] On: October 23, 2004 00:49 CDT
Comment/Review:
It's not bad... Grammar and spelling wise, it's excellent. Better than many fics on this site. Not bad writing style. I have problems with the character names, but that's just me, so it matters little. I would suggest, instead of flat out saying "flashback" and "end flashback," that you make a smooth transition into it. I didn't nitpick it like I do with most of the ones I've read, though, so I don't have much to say you could improve upon (maybe there isn't much, though :) ) Well, you're a good writer, so don't fret if no one else reviews. I haven't gotten a single review yet, myself :p Anyway, continue with your writing, hone your skills, and good luck :)
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