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| "NGE - Terminator" Reviews/Comments [ 17 ] | | Pages (2): [ 1 2 › » ] | Title: Masterful, engaging and fun
Reviewed By: zantaz [MediaMiner Member] On: July 27, 2009 11:48 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This review encompasses all chapters so far. Fantastic stuff. Please continue. What happens as the second Terminator attacks? What of the Angels, up to the seventeenth (Kaoru)? How will they respond and what of their arrival (if they exist) in the current timeline? And who is the empress? Sakura? And the identity of the woman that Fuyutsuki saw in his message? What remains of Mana's message? What else was revealed to Rei, Fuyutsuki and Kaji? How do they plan to establish contact with the Angels? Many questions need to be answered, and hopefully you'll continue the story soon. The crossover/mix is a bit jarring, but the melding of the characters in the scenario and their relationships are the best elements of this story. Terminators in most of their movies were mostly portrayed as cold villains anyway, and in this story they serve as mechanical menaces, nothing more. Possibly that is why the Terminator element is the weak element of this story (since they have yet to show how they can give the Angels any sort of fight), but the Evangelion characters' developments is what makes it fascinating. The interactions and the romances between the characters are very interesting, especially Shinji and the others. Personally I would prefer Shinji to end up with Rei, with Misato and Mana close by. Intimate encounters with Rei, Mana and Misato(in that particular hierarchy) would benefit Shinji. If they all stay with him in the end(with Hikari supporting Asuka), all the better. Both Shinji and Rei are learning about their feelings and Shinji is the only person other than Gendo that Rei had ever shown feelings to. They both need each other, Shinji to learn to not only love but care and nurture someone (especially someone like Rei) and Rei to feel and recognize love, besides only the loyalty and protective feelings for Shinji that she had developed. Misato is important as someone to help Shinji recognize both the depth of love that he can experience, and the soothing pleasures love can bring. She can also help Shinji discover his nurturing side as well, which would make him more in tune to the feelings of others. Asuka has seemingly become the level-headed companion (and more) who might contribute to Shinji by showing him a fun sexual romp or two and build Shinji's confidence and assertiveness. Mana can be the great friend and possible love who can, along with Asuka help Shinji find the will to fight with a level-headed mind in the face of any killing that he must do or be witness to. Both Mana and Misato play important roles directly or indirectly in helping Rei open up her feelings together with Shinji. The blossoming feelings of Misato and Mana with Shinji are also what gives dynamics and a touching aspect to this story. Other than Rei, intimate encounters with Mana and Misato would help the development of Shinji in the end as I mentioned before. After all, since they all have places in Shinji's heart then perhaps they are always part of him, but perhaps one finally gains the greatest place in his heart? An ending that benefits and gives happiness to all the characters, most especially the characters mentioned above is eagerly awaited. Keep up the good work. For more detailed suggestions and comments that I can't fit in here, do PM me. Would be glad to contribute in some way. Ganbatte!
| Reviewed By: the mustachioed cat [MediaMiner Member] On: December 19, 2006 21:06 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Best use of Mana EVER. Well, maybe Sins has something on this but, yeah. Eagerly await the rest of this. Already anticipating a deviation from the future relationship-wise (for apparently no reason save awareness of what is "supposed" to happen), but I suppose this is quite salient. Hints that English is not your first language, grammar errors and the like, but don't really detract from the fic itself. Still something to bear in mind. Nice job, catcha around.
| Reviewed By: Shran On: November 22, 2006 15:18 CST
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Well that was a fun read. It's been a while, but I remember everything from the previous chapters so I didn't have to go back and read. What a relief LOL. Anyways this sounds like it's going to be a Shinji/Harem for a while until he sort himself out LOL. Oh well it's expected especially if you're surrounded by females and a portion of them have feelings for you. And in this day and age polygamy is out of the question. Sucks to be him right now, but I personally want Rei to be his final choice, but that's for you to decide, since after all telling people about the future changes the new future, unless of course you wanted the new future to change. But I'm not going to get into temporal paradoxes. The idea of bringing the original Rei clones in, I like that, and it does bring up the possibilities that the new Rei clones will maybe mentor Rei, and help her into becoming a girl, rather than the 'wind-up' doll some people see her as. Well that's the shits for you eh? LOL. Well anyways, that's all from me Cheers ^^ Ja ne
| Reviewed By: James Axelrad On: November 15, 2006 20:24 CST
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i am glad the fic isn't dead, but the release schedule is rather poor.
| Title: Nice work
Reviewed By: EVA-09 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 22, 2006 14:47 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well i'll be damned. This is quite a nice story and you haven't updated in while. I want to know how this story proceeds, so please, update. I just hope that Rei won't get mad at Shinji.
| Reviewed By: Marine Brother Shran [MediaMiner Member] On: February 27, 2006 18:36 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
A really good read. I like how you've taken the all three Terminator movies, and meshed it in well with Evangelion. I like how you've kept everyone in check, and also how you've written your story. Truely commendable, that I applaud you if I could lol. Anyways, please update ASAP, I want to know more about their training, and how Rei is going to handle this situation about Shinji showing feelings towards Mana. I know that it's just a friendship, maybe kinship, but to Rei she's probably taking it the wrong way. I want to see how Rei is going to handle this situation. Knowing her, very subtly, or Shinji will step in and warm her heart up lol. But seriously, she needs to warm up soon, otherwise she's going to be a very cold mother indeed. Btw, correct me if I'm wrong but, Sakura, is the first Lillum was it, or was it Nephilum? If so, that means that she's Shinji's and Rei's daughter right? Sakura Ikari...has a nice ring to it actually. And Gendo dead? YAY!!!!! Anyways, that's all from me, I await your next update, whenever that is. Cheers ^^ Ja ne
| Reviewed By: Laser Crusader On: September 28, 2005 22:23 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
When are you going to update NGE-TERMINATOR? That fanfiction is my favorite out of all your stories. It is positively perfect in every way. I kind of missed the days when you updated this amazing website at least once a month, every month. Now a days you seem to update one of your stories just once every three months. I find that to be real bothersome. Anyway I wish you luck on the NGE-TERMINATOR!!!!
| Title: Friendship
Reviewed By: portercu [MediaMiner Member] On: June 06, 2005 15:46 CDT
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I recently read your cross over between Terminator and Eva and wanted you to kow im enjoying it alot. I've always been more of a darkfic type myself. So I'm getting more than a little kick out of the Misato scenerion you have going on. A little angst goes a long way with me. I really look forward to seeing more out of this one, and Lodoss. Cant claim to know much about the lodoss world but im enjoying it none the less.
| Title: NGE-Terminator at you home page.
Reviewed By: Laser Crusader On: May 24, 2005 21:12 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Greetings and Salutations. I went to yor homepage and read some excelent chapters of your NGE-Terminator fanfiction. I am the Laser Crusader. I am just a big fan of your work. I read most of your fanfictions and I have to say that the fanfiction NGE-Terminator is your very best fanfiction. I loved your newest chapters five (Living Together) and six (Friendships). I was first upset with the fact that you had Misato hospitalized. But after reading chapter six I have to say that things certainly have gotten a hell of a lot more interesting, an interesting love triangle. I mean this story just keeps on getting better and better. I keep reading and reading and I can never find myself getting bored reading your work. Keep up the good work. I have one question by the way. Exectly who is the father and mother of the Empress Sakura. I believe the father is Shinji. Because you stated that Empress Sakura was the half sister of Rei's child. So if Shinji is the father that could only leave three possibilites of who the mother is. Mana, Asuka, or Misato. (Mana is a possibilty because in the original Terminator movie John Connor's father was from the future "Frey from Futurama: ' I did the nasty with the pasty' ). (Asuka is a possibility because She raped him.) (Misato is a possbility because she now loves him.) Good luck with your future writings. And don't take forever to update. Okay.
| Reviewed By: Mr. Pointy On: May 11, 2005 01:27 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good stuff, it's got a lot of potential. Your portrayal of a couple of the characters is a bit off, but the sotry is otherwise pretty good. Could do with more Terminator and less NGE. Maybe a battle where a terminator gets into NERV and they have to fight it without the Evas. Like the police precinct in the first movie.
| Reviewed By: j0 On: May 07, 2005 10:01 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
It'd be a 10 if it wasn't so repetitive ;) It's certainly an interesting way of doing it, though. It gives each character's point of view, but at the cost of time and freshness.
| Reviewed By: Laser Crusader On: May 02, 2005 19:21 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a terrific story!!! I first read it a couple of weeks ago. But I never reviewed because I thought you were one of those writers who first dazzle us and then abandon us later because he or she is upset that not that many people review their story. I mean it has been an extremely long time since you updated this story. So I automatically assumed you quit. I am glad that I was wrong. So please do not be cruel and update much faster than you did last time. Good luck with your future writing. SO UPDATE, UPDATE, UPDATE!!!
| Reviewed By: Spike of Doom On: January 15, 2005 17:17 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Comment/Review:
Well i gotta say these first three chapters set the building blocks for a very promising story... dammit i feel so led on i wanna know what happens after!!! but i dont think my computer is going anywhere so i can wait.... but hurry up and update!!
| Reviewed By: Priest [MediaMiner Member] On: October 19, 2004 09:54 CDT
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an interesting tale, i look forward to more in the future... of this and your other stories. keep up the good work. Ja-ne
| Reviewed By: Jimbe On: October 14, 2004 17:11 CDT
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The sooner I see more of this, the more I can get into the story, the happier I'll be that I finally found something worth reading
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