Reviewed By: Npyu-chan On: March 29, 2005 17:08 CST
Comment/Review:
Unh. Have you ever read or seen Fruits Basket? Xel and Cat look like Kyo and Kagura... I guess Xelloss doesn't look OOC in himself, it's... I dunno, it's Catsuya that makes remarks about him that make him look OOC. She should just shut up, she is far more arrogant than him... whatever she says. Well, she's far too perfect, but this is only my opinion, becaus I like when OC are inhibated. ^__^ Anyways, for what's left, such as the style, the story or whatever, it's really great. Urgh. But try to make Cat, I dunno, less powerful, be beaten like shit, or make her suffer, or... Please, something that makes her look as someone not perfect, for now I find she just stinks. Well, no, but... SHE'S OMNISCIENT, SHE'S ALWAYS RIGHT, AND OH L-SAMA SHE IS THE MOST POWERFUL BEING IN THE WORLD OR SOMETHING LIKE THAT. Niah. It's only logic that she's annoying as hell. BREAK HER CONFIDENCE!(But hey, the first person narrative may not be the best way to make a character look instantly as it should) Then, when she's more developped, I will allow her to marry Xellos chan. What else... I like the idea of the beginning, Keeper of Souls, it sounds cool, and that she's promised to Xel... It has something that's really common, but hell, IT WAS PLANNED! lol! THAT's nice! So write more, please, because for now my opinion is "wait and see". Bye!
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