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| "Prophecy of Awakenings" Reviews/Comments [ 27 ] | | Pages (2): [ 1 2 › » ] | Title: True Awakenings
Reviewed By: EagleRay On: December 27, 2006 20:23 CST
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very nice story so far. Funny, suspenseful, cute, action - man, it's got all sorts of stuff going for it, doesn't it? Can't wait to see the next chapter. It was a little hard to follow at times due to some minor confusion with tenses, but those mixups have been growing fewer and fewer in the later chapters. Awesome work!
| Title: FFRG Review Pro-Ch.1
Reviewed By: Sueric [MediaMiner Member] On: March 19, 2006 13:19 CST
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Hi, and thank you for submitting your story to FFRG! First off, I wanted to congratulate you on a very nice piece. Your attention to spelling shows, and your grammar is very strong. There are a few things that I wanted to mention, though. In the prologue, if you want to capitalize the names of the planes, levels of existence, you need to capitalize all of them, ie: Human World, Spiritual Plane. Otherwise you need to leave them in lower case. Also, while your story is strong enough, I'd like to suggest that you work on further strengthening it by using more "show" instead of the "tell". Instead of telling your readers things, you need to let them see it through your words. Basically, if you use too many of the verbs of being (am, is, are, was, were, be, being, been) then you're 'telling' instead of 'showing'. It isn't really enough to tell your readers what your characters are feeling. You need to let them see it for themselves. There were a few places where your wording was a little choppy. I suggest reading your piece out loud. You can hear the flow better than if you were looking at it on paper or a computer screen. Overall, however, I found your piece to be well-written and thought-provoking, and I thank you for submitting your work to FFRG!
| Title: FFARG Review
Reviewed By: Pahhur [MediaMiner Member] On: October 02, 2005 12:48 CDT
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Alright, the writing style is well made, and defnately holds true to the Titan series. You do a good job of establishing characters and story. You do have several typos that a good beta would be able to fix. Otherwise, very good job and keep submitting to FFARG.
| Reviewed By: inuluvsu [MediaMiner Member] On: August 02, 2005 20:22 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ok It's been along time since I read Yuri, wow It's been along time since I read something other then Golden-Sama and books wow. This made me cry for Raven and of all the characters of Teen Titans I dislike Raven the most, but you made me like her I congratulate you on that, means your a good writer. Wow I was only one question, if Terra "loves" Beast Boy so much yet loves Raven at the same time Star does, why doesn't she realize you can't have three in a couple? Any was I love this although I'm a Robin/Star and BB/Terra fan this was really good since it stil showed they had feelings for each other, at least a little cuz some fics they never show it and it pisses me off, of course alot of fics piss me off, alot of them are the one the post before they right they hate Terra (no offense if you don't like her) cuz I am a dedicated Terra fan and even though it's there opinion they should make sure they say it kindly cuz one fic I was reading said up front I hate Terra just like that. Ok I've been Rambling off for a long time off topic so I shall get on topic. MOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOORRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRR REEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I love this fic and I want for Star/Raven/Terra stuff it more interesting with it in it. and I like it that u have jinx in alot of people forget about Cy and her even though there a cute couple. And Ice she is an confusing yet awsome OC, it's hard to make OC's and I mean it for real, I made one and it was so hard, bye
| Reviewed By: Kinsha [MediaMiner Member] On: April 29, 2005 17:13 CDT
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still unbelievably awsome, keep it up
| Reviewed By: mouserr [MediaMiner Member] On: March 22, 2005 05:48 CST
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'nother good chapter if a bit hard to follow at the start. action heavy parts tend to be that way tho *shrug* im in the 'havent figured it out yet' catagory so im rather interested in seeing how the next parts play out. from the way some parts of the story are going it seems like this could wind up being an epic tale, if thats the case ill not be complaining. >^-^< .
| Reviewed By: mouserr [MediaMiner Member] On: March 10, 2005 05:01 CST
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you sure pick the most interesting places to pause a story >~.~X.x<
keep up the good work on this and if you find that fic you were askin about please point me to it. raven/jinx = intersting mix >^.^
| Title: And so it progress.es.......slowly...
Reviewed By: Saint Raven [MediaMiner Member] On: March 09, 2005 09:31 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
But hey, that's okay, I'd rather you take your time and build things up properly than rush it and ruin the 'fic. Great job, I liked the chapter! (gives the Batista Thumbs Up)
| Title: Look at this!
Reviewed By: Saint Raven [MediaMiner Member] On: March 03, 2005 12:14 CST
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Oh yeah, here's the address of the C2 community I statted on Fanfiction.net. It's all about same-sex TT couples. If you know of any good stories, then tell me. The Raven/Jinx story is on there. http://www.fanfiction.net/c2/12049/0/1/
| Title: Pasts Revealed was pretty good!
Reviewed By: Saint Raven [MediaMiner Member] On: March 03, 2005 12:12 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hehehe, sorry, but I've just got so many ideas for the TT fic I'm working on. Say, can I use Ice? Please? (does the Beast Boy "Kitty" eyes)
| Reviewed By: mouserr [MediaMiner Member] On: February 22, 2005 17:14 CST
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whens the next chapter due out? .... seriously when? got me well and truly hooked on this story you do. the robin/ice backstory looks really promising, with all the varied twists this story has taken im enjoying it more and more with each new chapter, next 1 sounds like itll be a major good 1. keep up the good work. >^-^
| Title: Hehehe...
Reviewed By: Saint Raven (Mediaminer sucks right now) On: February 22, 2005 00:33 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey, I got an idea. A love scenario between Jinx and Ice! Yay! Go girls, go girls! I liked this chapter, hopefully the next one will be longer. Keep it up!
| Title: And the drama increases...
Reviewed By: Saint Raven [MediaMiner Member] On: February 09, 2005 13:15 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Yeah! The more Jinx I see, the better I like the story! The triangle is gonna get pretty convaluted the way you're going, but that just makes for more drama! Also, I found a good Raven/Jinx fic on fanfiction.net called "Pitch and Pink" I can't remember the author though, oh well. It's really good, not complete yet, but most fics aren't. Hope you enjoy, and hope you update A Titan's Hero (Raven'Jinx) soon! Also, I like Dreams of Red, good job!
| Reviewed By: mouserr [MediaMiner Member] On: February 04, 2005 22:06 CST
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i think i like this depiction of the end of the club scene more than the other tho i can see the other happening specially with the chem influence on alien biology. glad you removed that particular burden from her >^-^< cant wait to see whats next, might be interesting to see if the titans would extend an invite to Ice and/or Jynx. Jynx mostly since as a former baddie and the whole 'second chance' theme the titans abide by ... eh either way great story thus far and lookin forward to the next several chapters.
| Title: I NEED MORE! AND YAY ON RAVEN/JINX!!!
Reviewed By: Saint Raven [MediaMiner Member] On: February 04, 2005 19:14 CST
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Oh thank you! I give you...THE SUPER DUPER CHIBI CONGO LINE!!! (Chibi Saint Raven, Raven, Jinx, Starfire, and Terra all line up and start dancing)
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