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| "Brightness and Darkness" Reviews/Comments [ 21 ] | Title: je ne sais pas. qu-ce que c'est? ahh!
Reviewed By: chaos_kyes_fallen_angel [MediaMiner Member] On: March 01, 2005 18:47 CST
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nani? what happened to chapter fifteen? its not showing. >.> mer. post! post!
| Title: ch14
Reviewed By: chaos_kyes_fallen_angel [MediaMiner Member] On: March 01, 2005 18:41 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
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whhaaaat? okay.. just because she when to fight him alone doesn't mean they can't just go help her- so why is cloud freaking out? >_> they should all go fight together! im sure that THREE keyblade masters AND a... ... demonic.. thing... could take on ansem and kick but. whoohoo! all they need now is a daycare for the kids.. xD but... about the keyblades... the original keyblade is the only one that you don't have to have the chain to. the chains just change its form. if you recall, in the game, when you first reach traverse town, squall tries to take the blade away from sora, but it just reappears in his hands. so, im finding that a little nonrealistic.. the keyblade is a weapon from the heart- its not even a true material item.
| Title: oops >>
Reviewed By: chaos_kyes_fallen_angel [MediaMiner Member] On: March 01, 2005 18:21 CST
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gar- i meant to say riku didnt love KAZE.. -.-
| Title: ch13
Reviewed By: chaos_kyes_fallen_angel [MediaMiner Member] On: March 01, 2005 18:20 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
oo, tasty. damn, i dont know what to think... im surprised they didnt do that when they were alone all those years. i wonder why it just popped up all the sudden, after just seeing their girls? maybe because riku thought he didn't love kairi? hmmm... i wonder if the girls would think it was sexy, or would they get jealous? so many possibilities, heeheehee. >_< i like this new developement.... >,> i see the grammar mistakes getting less and less, but theres still a couple.
| Reviewed By: chaos_kyes_fallen_angel [MediaMiner Member] On: March 01, 2005 17:56 CST
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wow..the drama.. hm... im not sure if i commented on this one. >_> maybe im getting my chapters mixed up.. poor abused cloud. XD for some reason, i just cant bring myself to feel pity for kaze. XD i think i have something against her, lol. ehn, ::shrug:: and moving on to ch13
| Title: ch11
Reviewed By: chaos_kyes_fallen_angel [MediaMiner Member] On: February 27, 2005 16:05 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
::cheers excitedly:: alright!! go kairi!!! kick but with that keyblade! go unlock someones ass! XD that was cool. oh yeah-lol- and man are they slow.... seemed like it took them forever to figure out who alls related to who. XD i mean, like, what... 3-4 chapters? XD;; still- it was great. i loved it. oh- and man- XD o_O ansem is SO perverted. still need to work on the grammar and spelling.
| Title: ch 10
Reviewed By: chaos_kyes_fallen_angel [MediaMiner Member] On: February 27, 2005 15:39 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
excellent.
| Title: chapter... uh...9? maybe 8?
Reviewed By: chaos_kyes_fallen_angel [MediaMiner Member] On: February 27, 2005 15:16 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
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hm. -.- yeah. looks like kaze is taking over the spot-light.. >< ::sigh..:: oh well.. at least theres good interaction with the other original characters and her -_-; ^_^ everytime i read this fic, i hear sora's voice, and i see his little pouty face. XD its so cute! i love his voice, its so soft and gentle and innocent- "heavenly", just as you described it. hm.. i wonder who ansem's wife was? oh yeah- i forgot to review the second chapter, and the first review i wrote was for the prelude, prequel.. pre.. whatever. >_>
| Title: ch8
Reviewed By: chaos_kyes_fallen_angel [MediaMiner Member] On: February 27, 2005 14:57 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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hmm... hey, you're pretty good at insults. XD some of them are really funny. >_> cant wait to see more of riku and sora. ^_^ um... i still hate aeris. >_> ^_^ it was pretty funny how everyone was blaming cloud.
| Title: chapter.. uh.. 7? maybe?
Reviewed By: chaos_kyes_fallen_angel [MediaMiner Member] On: February 27, 2005 14:29 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
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hm. sephiroth rocks. uh... ... cloud is cool to. aeris is STILL bitch. >_> poor cloud.. ,,-_-,, i say you make tifa come over and kick aeris butt!! XD tifa always understood.. ^_^... um... >.> yeah. there was a lot of grammatical errors in that one. o_O
| Title: ch 6
Reviewed By: chaos_kyes_fallen_angel [MediaMiner Member] On: February 27, 2005 01:18 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
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hm.. cloudandtear?? -.o i dont know about that one.. oh yeah, and i just have to say, im a tifa fan. i absolutely totally completely ABHOR aeris. i hate her. i really do. -.- on my game, i named her IT, capital I T. hahah.. it was pretty funny. apparently, the game creators agreed with me, because we all threw a party when she died. XD also- >_> her theme song is freakin creepy. sigh.. alas.. if only the messed up disney used tifa instead of aeris. -_- whyy? why? in the game, he loved tifa >< not aeris. -- ::scoffs and snorts disgustedly...:: sorry, just had to get that off my chest. >_> i hope theres no side romance bw him and aeris. >_> ::gag:: and moving on to ch 7... oh yeah, btw= if you wanted to make the cloud tear thing more believeable.. you might wantto put more detail about the interaction between him and her just before that- his expressions, the mood... its just kinda wierd how it comes out of no where, too sudden. and oh man i cant wait for kairi to kick butt! lets bring on the third keyblade master.. i was getting worried there that youd let an oc char get all the fame and glory and outshine our beloved originals. ^_~;; then again, i haven't stopped worrying yet... but at least her dad is infamous, instead of famous. that makes her a bit more appealing, instead of disgustingly perfect
| Reviewed By: chaos_kyes_fallen_angel [MediaMiner Member] On: February 27, 2005 00:50 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
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hmph. im glad that ended nicely- i was getting annoyed because kaze keeps doing everything and kairi is like a whimp. -.- kaze this.. kaze that.. but bam. o_O kairi fights back! THANK YOU. -.- i was getting worried there.... hm... i think there could've been more detail with kairi's big scene- it all went kinda fast there at the end. if i were you i wouldn't worry about how long the chapters are- to me, longer is better when its quality that counts.
| Reviewed By: chaos_kyes_fallen_angel [MediaMiner Member] On: February 27, 2005 00:34 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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wow... hm.. if i was kairi, id be thinking "man shes a bitch" but then again, poor kairi is too sweet. she lets kaze walk all over her, and STILL thinks shes at fault. =/ its sad, and it reminds me of myself. >_> maybe she should fight back sometime. or better yet, sora should protect her against kaze >_< thatd be cool.. oh well, we'll see. also, i know just how kaze and riku feel about the growing up with no love thing, and the freaky perverted screwed up father. >_> at the end, i thought it was really cute and ironic how kaze curses them, but follows them into the portal anyway ^_^ you can tell they're all her world. >_> annnd.. i was wondering.. whatever happened to the kairi and kaze being friends thing? XD lol hate/love relationship?
| Title: hmmm...
Reviewed By: chaos_kyes_fallen_angel [MediaMiner Member] On: February 27, 2005 00:14 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
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awww, doesn't kairi get to eat at least?
| Title: chapter 1
Reviewed By: chaos_kyes_fallen_angel [MediaMiner Member] On: February 26, 2005 14:23 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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whoohoo! ::cheers:: go kaze! XD;; i hope kairi knows how to fight, for her own good. heheheh. also, i love the kids; they're so cute and amusing, they add some nice humor to lighten things up. on to the second chapter...
| Reviewed By: chaos_kyes_fallen_angel [MediaMiner Member] On: February 26, 2005 13:55 CST
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heehee im so excited. ^_^ i just read the first chapter.. its really good. im glad i checked out the rest of your work- because there is a sequel!! anyway, im going to go on and read the rest of this, and maybe ill refer some of my fans and friends to this story..
| Reviewed By: Blueice Anime Gurl [MediaMiner Member] On: February 01, 2005 22:18 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really love your story, i was on edge practically the whole way through, i luv this story, and i luv 'What about us', although i thought u made Kari a little whiny, and her daughter abit of a cry baby but, i still luv this story.... I love ur style of writing so I gave u 8, it's really good read, smooth and u have a nice flow so tat's a 9. The spelling ang grammar could have been a bit better, like on some parts were confusing to read, like when u put the wrong gender of a character... It's really fun story, jokes are hilarious and the Kids are just to much so there i gave a 9.... Other than that I really enjoy this story so my over all rating is a 9. I fell bad tat i didn't notice ur story sooner, although i read 'What about us' along time ago, i didn't know about it's sequal, i would have been all ready to read alot sooner. Any ways i hope you post the epilouge becuase it would be real bitch if u left it like this.... SO i guess all i can say now is good luck with any other stories u hav in the futuer, be sure to look out for more reviews from me. So until next time..... Peace... (hehe kinda wrote a novel...lol)
| Reviewed By: Blueice Anime Gurl [MediaMiner Member] On: February 01, 2005 22:06 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really love your story, i was on edge practically thw whole way thorugh, i luv this story, and i love Wht about us, although i thought u made Kari a little whiny, and her daughter abit of a cry baby but i still luv his story.... I love ur style of writing, it's really good, smooth and u have a nice flow, tha spelling ang gramer could have been a bit better, some parts were confusing to read, where i had to read a pargraph over again. I really enjoy this story so tats a 9, and well it's a real good read so i gave it 9 there. I fell bad tat i didn't notice ur stroy later, although i read What about us, along time ago, i didn't know about it's sequal, i would have been all ready to read alot sooner. Any ways i hope you post the epilouge becuase it would be real bitch if u left it like this.... SO i guess i can say is good luck with any other stories u hav in the futuer, be sure to look out form more reviews from me. So until next time..... Peace... (hehe kinda wrote a novel...lol)
| Reviewed By: Mangagirl128 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 10, 2005 22:24 CST
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uhhh.... where's the chapter?
| Reviewed By: Mangagirl128 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 20, 2004 22:29 CST
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im so sad. im the lone reveiwer. : ( But honest to god it's a good fic. ; D so please update.
| Reviewed By: Mangagirl128 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 24, 2004 22:17 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I LOVE both of your stories! please continue this one.
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