| "Somewhere Only We Know: Sequel to Becoming Trunks" Reviews/Comments [ 29 ] |
Reviewed By: Sakura Li Samurai [MediaMiner Member] On: November 11, 2007 10:19 CST
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i love your story!! i hope you update soon and im also sorry for your lost. My grandfather died On May 2007. I was really close to him...... Before he died he gave a bracelet that belong to his older sister. I wear it all the time. Also when i was little he used to give me a jar full of pennies or some other change. And that is what he left me .*crys* Anyways i hope you update sooooooon! i love it. AIM:Blackanese003 MSN: PlatinumHearts2003
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Reviewed By: LisaB [MediaMiner Member] On: June 10, 2006 12:13 CDT
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I really really liked this understated ending. No fireworks, no overdone lemon---to me it's just the way life is. Just acknowledge the truth of it and move on with your life. Miyuki will always be one of my favorite (if not my favorite) OC. I liked her from the begining. She was never a Mary Sue and you really gave her life and made her worthy of Trunks. Thanks for finally finishing this fic.
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Title: Aw love
Reviewed By: maccam [MediaMiner Member] On: May 16, 2006 21:10 CDT
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Yes i'm soooo glad that they are going to start over. it's about time :P. update!!!!!!
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Title: Surpeised
Reviewed By: maccam [MediaMiner Member] On: May 09, 2006 16:18 CDT
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WOW i'm freezing :P anyway i'm so happy that you updated. Why is it when people fall in love they make it hard on themselves??? I hope now that everything is on the table they both can come together. Glad your writing again robin, i've missed this story love *HUGS*
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Reviewed By: debbiechan [MediaMiner Member] On: June 11, 2005 15:11 CDT
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Awww, that was touching. Miyuki's uncertainty rings true. Keep writing. That's an order.
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Reviewed By: LisaB(not logged in) On: June 10, 2005 16:14 CDT
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Gah! You evil, evil woman! Months with nothing and to leave me like that! You have no heart. So thrilled to see you updated this. I would check on it every now and then just in case MM.org wasn't emailing me. I hope the summer is good to you and lets you finish.
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Title: Somewhere Only We Know: Sequel to Becoming Trunks
Reviewed By: maccam [MediaMiner Member] On: June 10, 2005 15:31 CDT
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I'll tell you what happens now...um i think i'll wait for you to tell it ^^.. *cries* she's not PG but i guess it's for the best right? I loved the last line. please don't wait to HELL greezes over again before you update ok...I guess now i won't nag you to much so you can write EH!!! LOVE ALWAYS MARIA....
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Title: Well you did say please...lol
Reviewed By: rose of vegetasei On: June 10, 2005 15:25 CDT
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Great cliffhanger. My head just went down and my mind was like "she had to end it there didn't she?" The only thing I caught that you might want to fix is "She must have heard me¼"..there's a 1/4 at the end, delete that (I'm surprised it didn't screw up your chapter). I never realized how much Miyuki was modeled after you (like her photography side...and when I read your post at the Salon, I didn't know some of the issues protrayed through Miyuki were based on life experiences - it's a brave thing to be able to talk about personal things like that). When Miyuki woke up, I was beginning to wonder what happened to Trunks...he like fell off for a bit then appeared at work...you could maybe have said that Miyuki woke to find her bed empty. She just woke up, got up, and life went on (just seemed a bit strange to me...and if you did add a blip about Trunks being gone then you can smack me...I'm a bit sleepy right now). Also, what was the thing with Marron? It seems this is the first time I saw Marron mentioned...unless it's been so long between updates that I don't remember). And what about Sachi? When will he find out she's a big fat liar?
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Reviewed By: debbiechan [MediaMiner Member] On: March 30, 2005 16:15 CST
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*sniff* Writing by definition is therapy. It's communicating with other people but also yourself. I'm glad I waited to catch up with this story until today--if I'd read it back when I was blue, I would've been sobbing all over my computer! Anyway, your OC is a real gal. I happen to like the pregnancy device in stories--it often forces people to make up their minds because it's such a life-changing event. Even if M isn't pg, the idea that she is will change her. Life and death and little dramas--that's what make this an addicting fic.
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Title: Somewhere Only We Know: Sequel to Becoming Trunks
Reviewed By: maccam [MediaMiner Member] On: March 27, 2005 18:51 CST
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you have another FAN..i've really enjoyed this story. i wish i could say that i was close to my own dad. he's stil alive but not really in my life..i love your writing robin you make us apart of their live when i read this story. please update soon..(and i hope she's PG....maria
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Reviewed By: LisaB (not logged in) On: March 07, 2005 13:52 CST
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*wails* Poor Miyuki! Thanks for letting Trunks be there for her. Such a lovely chapter! *sniff* I loved the showdown at the restaurant too. I almost felt sorry for Sacchi---almost! I don't want Miyuki to be pregnant just because I want her to choose to be with Trunks without the added pressure of a pregnancy.
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Title: too lazy to log in
Reviewed By: Rose of Vegeta (no logged in) On: March 04, 2005 10:56 CST
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I was about to cry with the death scene especially knowing that a lot of it had to do with your own father's death (hugs). I hope writing this chapter helped with you coping with your loss. On a lighter note, I can't wait to see Trunks's reaction to the news (evil woman...that was an evil cliffie).
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Reviewed By: dbzfanjess On: February 26, 2005 20:23 CST
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Great job on both chapters... I love your characters... and the story is wonderful... you do get to be the only trunks writer I read :)... Can't wait for the next update... that was wonderful
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Reviewed By: roseofvegeta [MediaMiner Member] On: January 11, 2005 13:46 CST
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What a drama! Too much for Miyuki to handle I can tell. I'm looking forward to the dinner though...this should be fun. I'm guessing Trunks wants to try to scare Sachi off through Vegeta. I feel bad that Miyuki is under so much stress that she started smoking again...I can relate to that to an extent. Hope to see an update.
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Reviewed By: LisaB [MediaMiner Member] On: December 26, 2004 10:44 CST
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Poor, poor, Miyuki! So many changes. I'm glad she's going to meetings, but there's so much else to deal with too. I can't wait for dinner. *grins* Update soon.
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Reviewed By: LisaB [MediaMiner Member] On: December 12, 2004 10:39 CST
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OMG! I can't wait to see Vegeta lean on Sachi! That little suprise I never saw coming. And good for Sayuri for hiding the paper! How is poor Trunks going to convince Miyuki he's serious? I know you're taking a break, but I'll be waiting for more when you're ready!
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Reviewed By: roseofvegeta [MediaMiner Member] On: December 08, 2004 07:26 CST
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Poor Trunks. I never felt so bad for a guy before. I feel bad he is on Miyukis shit list too (most times I would not feel bad for the guy). I literally feel like bashing that Sachi girl (boy if I was a Saiyan that girl would be dead). Found a little spelling error: immediately regretting the words as soon (you had son instead) as they came out of his mouth It's the scene that Vegeta says you do not have to like someone to conceive a child with them (which I thought was a funny line). I await in suspense for more. Ciao!
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Reviewed By: LisaB [MediaMiner Member] On: November 26, 2004 11:54 CST
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So sorry I missed a chapter! I went through a no reading spell, but I never forgot about your fic! I really like Miyuki. I like everything you've done with her and I also like how Trunks interacts with her. I love how these two pull back together so easily (a sign of true love!) but I'm sure there's more in store for this pair. Great chapters!
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Reviewed By: roseofvegeta [MediaMiner Member] On: November 22, 2004 10:45 CST
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OMG! Such interesting twists. Miyukis father has entered the pic. I think there is potential of this event to affect Miyukis personality and what happens in the future. And then there is Sachi (wants to gag). I just met the character and already I want to bash her little head in (I like when Trunks thought of picking her up and tossing her out of the office). Though I thought Sachi could have been describe more of how she looks and the such...I see a potential of Sachi confronting Miyuki and making things tougher for Trunks and Miyuki (yes I think too much but it would increase the drama and make things interesting...this fic has become my personal soap). I don't know what you were planning on doing with Sachi and if she will have more of a role as the story progresses but since she has entered the picture and obviously has a attachment (well obsession) then there is a chance for Sachi to do whatever it takes to keep Trunks. I used to watch an anime (teen soap) that did something like that. Well, this fic keeps getting interesting and cannot wait to see where it goes.
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Reviewed By: rose of vegeta [MediaMiner Member] On: November 19, 2004 13:55 CST
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Wow. You did wonderfully. I could not help but to chuckle at Bulmas maternal pride for Trunks after announcing Miyukis resignation (as we both know its a mother thing). I found one little error (sorry I cant help myself...its something that tends to stick out when I read though it was a minor word omission). Cant wait to read more. Plus, was Trunks proposal serious and will Miyuki eventually say yes? I am giddy as a school girl right now. LOL. Cant wait for an update. PS do not pay attention to my grammar right now since mm does not allow me to use apostrophe and the such...my grammar is much better than this. LOL.
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Reviewed By: debbiechan [MediaMiner Member] On: November 18, 2004 15:47 CST
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*sigh* what a charmer that Trunks. just like his daddy, sweeping a girl off her feet and inspiring her to throw shoes! What a guy. Loved this chapter. You're making me get googly over Trunks--and I really thought of him as a mere boy for a while there...but he's all grown up now, isn't he? *perv smile*
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Reviewed By: LisaB [MediaMiner Member] On: November 08, 2004 12:38 CST
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Well, well, well, Trunks is finally going to have to grow up! I wonder if he will take his father's advice? I really enjoy Miyuki's story and can't wait to meet her mom and see where that's going!
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Reviewed By: rose of vegeta [MediaMiner Member] On: November 04, 2004 08:47 CST
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Leave it to Vegeta to give advice on love. LOL I thought that was a good comical relief whether you intended that or not. I love how you go back and forth with the Trunks and Miyukis emotions and thoughts. It gives the reader a good idea where the characters are coming form and in my opnion helps the reader to root them on. Keep up the great work.
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Reviewed By: rose of vegeta [MediaMiner Member] On: November 04, 2004 08:47 CST
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Leave it to Vegeta to give advice on love. LOL I thought that was a good comical relief whether you intended that or not. I love how you go back and forth with the Trunks and Miyukis emotions and thoughts. It gives the reader a good idea where the characters are coming form and in my opnion helps the reader to root them on. Keep up the great work.
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Reviewed By: rose of vegeta [MediaMiner Member] On: October 21, 2004 10:37 CDT
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I just wanted to tell you that I love your fic. I read Becoming Trunks and I had to read this. They way you write captures human emotion so realistically. This could be an honest to goodness real life story (if it was not for the fact that it is a DBZ fanfic ^_^). Your style is wonderful and I cannot think of anything that would make the fic better. Keep it up!
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Reviewed By: debbiechan [MediaMiner Member] On: October 20, 2004 12:22 CDT
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goody! I love it when two smart characters work against each other and towards each other. This promises to be a grown-up romance--with both characters growing up some more. I like your Trunks here--arrogant but vulnerable. I see the chink in his armor like with his Dad, only Trunks has more human contours. Can't wait to read more.
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Reviewed By: LisaB [MediaMiner Member] On: October 19, 2004 19:24 CDT
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Oh no! Miyuki, you've got to be strong, girl! Don't give in to that luscious speciman of manhood too easily! Now what? The pull is there--what's keeping them apart? I know you'll fill us in when you're ready!
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Reviewed By: LisaB [MediaMiner Member] On: October 19, 2004 15:51 CDT
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Good start. I'm hoping you'll give us a few flashbacks on how these two grew apart so quickly. Trunks seemed so in love with her; I can't believe he'd let her go that easily. First love is so overwhelming. I really like Miyuki and I can't wait to see how she makes Trunks squirm! I think it's OK to leave it "What Matters Most". that other story is a B/V, so it's hardly the same . Maybe a subtitle as well. I can't think of anything clever right now, but I'll think on it.
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Reviewed By: debbiechan [MediaMiner Member] On: October 09, 2004 09:09 CDT
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YEY! I'm glad you're writing the sequel. And it's started off with all the tension anyone could want from a romance. I so rarely get to see my Trunks in a canon timeline realistic hetero romance, this is a treat. She's a great OC--she's really come into her own. Fire and vulnerabilty. She works.
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