| "Kiite Kudasai" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] |
Reviewed By: akuma_river [MediaMiner Member] On: January 07, 2005 05:08 CST
Comment/Review:
What's going to happen? Keep up the great work. coolsa.
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Reviewed By: akuma_river [MediaMiner Member] On: November 14, 2004 10:16 CST
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Whoa. What is going on? Keep up the good work. coolsa.
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Reviewed By: Crystal Child [MediaMiner Member] On: October 13, 2004 14:34 CDT
Comment/Review:
I would just like to note that the title's error has already been pointed out to me and I'll change it when I have time (right now I'm late for class). And I noticed that formatting thing, it did it at fanfiction.net as well, I'm not sure how to fix it here, but I'll mess around with it and figure something out. Thanx.
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Title: npothing like angst to wake you up in the morning
Reviewed By: Shariku Onikage [MediaMiner Member] On: October 13, 2004 06:20 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 3 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Out of character but still strangely enjoyable. You should keep this as a one shot to keep it workable. Very poetic and touching. 2 grammar points. One, the formatting appears to have done something weird. Apostophies turn into 'f's for some reason, e.g. 'didn't' turns to 'didft'. You should probably fix this. Two, kikimasu cannot be used with the suffix to turn it into a request. You need to switch from present polite verb into a 'te' verb. In this case, it gets turned to kiitekudasai.
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