| "The Real Folk Blues" Reviews/Comments [ 170 ] |
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Title: yayness!
Reviewed By: the beauty behind the mask (not logged in) On: May 08, 2005 12:44 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow kuroune and youko fluff its so heart warming I love it but when is hiei going to come in? when is kurama going to meet kagome? when is yuusuke going to know about kazuma and kagome? oh please update faster i'm dying here let me know!!!!
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Reviewed By: deafening silence [MediaMiner Member] On: May 07, 2005 20:26 EDT
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*applauds* Much better! I like how you are showing that youko is more than just a leacherous fox. Very waffy moment between youko and kuronue there. I still noticed a couple of your word choices that could have been better, and while i am positively thrilled that you are starting to use commas, you are still having a problem with run-on sentances. The best advice i can give you is to read through the chapter two or three times before you post it. It's amazing how many stupid mechanical errors, and sentences that just sound awkward you can catch and fix by doing that. You never understand how much things like that take away from a story until they are fixed. Also, if you think it would help, i'd be willing to give betaing a whirl. I just really want this story to live up to the potential i know is there. Well, i guess that's about it for this chappie. So drop me an email if you feel like it, or i'll just hang around until you post the next chapter! Ja!
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Title: the real folk blues
Reviewed By: the beauty behind the mask [MediaMiner Member] On: April 25, 2005 13:27 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow i love your stories there so cool and intriguing! i love them so much! oh yeah i saw your profile on photobucket your such a cute chick!...at least i thought you were a chick no offense but you make a cute guy or girl. don't take that as harassment or anything ok. well i wanted to ask you if you were going to consider my request? remember i asked you if you can cowrite a fic with me well write to me back if your interested oh and sorry about your computer hope you get anew one well update when you can bye bye! ^_^
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Title: queen of hearts killer
Reviewed By: update! On: April 13, 2005 16:58 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
where is this story going not that i'm complaining its just a question i like it update
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Reviewed By: deafening silence [MediaMiner Member] On: April 06, 2005 19:40 EDT
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*preens* All in a day's work, me lassie, all in a day's work. But just to make sure we're clear, it wasn't that i didn't know what the words meant, they were just being used out of context. Anyway, this chapter fixed that problem, but seems to have made another more obvious. Commas are your friend, my flattened fruit, while run-on sentences are not. Now that the constructive criticism is out of the way, we can get to more important things, like, when are we going to find out what's going on with kagome and hiei? You let that little tidbit slip about her knowing who he is, she actually called his name when she was in trouble, then you just left it! The suspense is killing me here! Oh, and i was wondering, did any cookies come with that jar? Because i think it only fair that you share the wealth with the person responsible for that wonderful new pilsbury doughboy jar, ne? Hehe. Either way, i am really enjoying this story, and hope you update soon!
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Reviewed By: deafening silence (not signed in) On: March 22, 2005 18:16 EST
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OK. First let me say that you are doing a wonderful job of keeping the characters IC. You have an excellent story line going here, and i really am looking forward to seeing what happens next. However, there's something that's really bothering me about your writing. I may be wrong, but it looks like you went through your story putting in random synonyms for words. Sometimes this is no problem, since it may make the story sound more intelligent, and keep the author from using the same words over and over again. However, many, many of the words you are using instead of the originals just don't work. While they are indeed synonyms, their individual definition doesn't make sense where you're putting them. For example. In on sentence, you say kagome is "plodding her eyes open." I'm willing to bet you originally had "dragging" or something like that here. While dragging definately makes sense, plodding just - doesn't. This kind of thing appears throughout your work, somethimes going so far as to make the story hard to understand. As far as i'm concerned, though, this is the only big flaw to what is definately a great story. So, if you could work on fixing that, you would have a piece here that anyone would be proud to claim as their own.
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Reviewed By: Ryukotsusei [MediaMiner Member] On: March 18, 2005 20:53 EST
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Can't wait to see everyone's reaction when she comes home. Yusuke's reaction once he finds out Kagome knows Kuwabara should be priceless. Update soon please.
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Title: wow!
Reviewed By: foxyprincess On: March 14, 2005 08:12 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow i love this story its so funny you keep the characters from going O.O.c which is good but i'm wondering not that i'm complaining where is this story headed to? please whatever you do don't let it be a kuwabara/kagome if it is i'll still read it anyway, i'm dying here please update soon asap!
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Reviewed By: crazy-punk-gurl [MediaMiner Member] On: March 11, 2005 18:45 EST
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Great progress in here. I love how Kagome's mind goes to one thing to another, it's very interesting. I like how you did Kuwabara and Shizuru in here, they are very in character insead of OOC that some people do that I think should study more in anime. Great job in here! Please update soon!!!XD *~*crazy-punk-gurl*~*
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Reviewed By: Ryukotsusei [MediaMiner Member] On: March 10, 2005 21:45 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
another good chapter, please update soon
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Reviewed By: Ryukotsusei [MediaMiner Member] On: March 05, 2005 23:56 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
very interesting story, I don't see why it doesn't have more reviews. It definity grabbed my attention. Please update soon, I can't wait to see what happens next.
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Title: the real folk blues!!
Reviewed By: i love you On: February 24, 2005 20:12 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
yeah this story rocks first suuichi and the youko thing then kagome's and yusuke's mom a lesbian cool! then kuwabaka hahahaha love it but when is kurama going to be in it? and hiei what of him? update update update!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!now!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!update!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! |
Reviewed By: crazy-punk-gurl [MediaMiner Member] On: February 24, 2005 17:35 EST
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Ya~y! You updated! I'm so happy!... Kagome seems really scared of Kikyo...O.o Including Kikyo's, uh, 'gentle' side... if she really haves one, I was really surprised about that. And the flower in Kags hair, O.O weirdness... I like it! I'm weird, I know but I can't help but like anime and crazy things. Anyway, great chapter! Please update! *~*crazy-punk-gurl*~*
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Title: the real folk blues
Reviewed By: tinky winky On: February 23, 2005 09:59 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow i love this!!!!! its so orginal yuusuke and kagome step siblings kags mom a lesbian with atsuko wow orginal!! when are they going to find out of hiei and kag's relationship!!! where's this stroy turning to? i love it update!
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Reviewed By: kagomeme2000 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 23, 2005 04:42 EST
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when am i going to find out Kagomes relationship with hiei!!!!!!!!! And When is Kurabara goonas find out that urimeshi is her brother!!!!!!!!!!! hes tooo goddamn slow!!!!!!!!!!!! Can you please improve your spelling
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