| "The Real Folk Blues" Reviews/Comments [ 170 ] |
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Reviewed By: deafening silence (not signed in) On: March 22, 2005 18:16 EST
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OK. First let me say that you are doing a wonderful job of keeping the characters IC. You have an excellent story line going here, and i really am looking forward to seeing what happens next. However, there's something that's really bothering me about your writing. I may be wrong, but it looks like you went through your story putting in random synonyms for words. Sometimes this is no problem, since it may make the story sound more intelligent, and keep the author from using the same words over and over again. However, many, many of the words you are using instead of the originals just don't work. While they are indeed synonyms, their individual definition doesn't make sense where you're putting them. For example. In on sentence, you say kagome is "plodding her eyes open." I'm willing to bet you originally had "dragging" or something like that here. While dragging definately makes sense, plodding just - doesn't. This kind of thing appears throughout your work, somethimes going so far as to make the story hard to understand. As far as i'm concerned, though, this is the only big flaw to what is definately a great story. So, if you could work on fixing that, you would have a piece here that anyone would be proud to claim as their own.
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Reviewed By: Ryukotsusei [MediaMiner Member] On: March 18, 2005 20:53 EST
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Can't wait to see everyone's reaction when she comes home. Yusuke's reaction once he finds out Kagome knows Kuwabara should be priceless. Update soon please.
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Title: wow!
Reviewed By: foxyprincess On: March 14, 2005 08:12 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow i love this story its so funny you keep the characters from going O.O.c which is good but i'm wondering not that i'm complaining where is this story headed to? please whatever you do don't let it be a kuwabara/kagome if it is i'll still read it anyway, i'm dying here please update soon asap!
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Reviewed By: crazy-punk-gurl [MediaMiner Member] On: March 11, 2005 18:45 EST
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Great progress in here. I love how Kagome's mind goes to one thing to another, it's very interesting. I like how you did Kuwabara and Shizuru in here, they are very in character insead of OOC that some people do that I think should study more in anime. Great job in here! Please update soon!!!XD *~*crazy-punk-gurl*~*
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Reviewed By: Ryukotsusei [MediaMiner Member] On: March 10, 2005 21:45 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
another good chapter, please update soon
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Reviewed By: Ryukotsusei [MediaMiner Member] On: March 05, 2005 23:56 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
very interesting story, I don't see why it doesn't have more reviews. It definity grabbed my attention. Please update soon, I can't wait to see what happens next.
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Title: the real folk blues!!
Reviewed By: i love you On: February 24, 2005 20:12 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
yeah this story rocks first suuichi and the youko thing then kagome's and yusuke's mom a lesbian cool! then kuwabaka hahahaha love it but when is kurama going to be in it? and hiei what of him? update update update!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!now!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!update!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! |
Reviewed By: crazy-punk-gurl [MediaMiner Member] On: February 24, 2005 17:35 EST
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Ya~y! You updated! I'm so happy!... Kagome seems really scared of Kikyo...O.o Including Kikyo's, uh, 'gentle' side... if she really haves one, I was really surprised about that. And the flower in Kags hair, O.O weirdness... I like it! I'm weird, I know but I can't help but like anime and crazy things. Anyway, great chapter! Please update! *~*crazy-punk-gurl*~*
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Title: the real folk blues
Reviewed By: tinky winky On: February 23, 2005 09:59 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow i love this!!!!! its so orginal yuusuke and kagome step siblings kags mom a lesbian with atsuko wow orginal!! when are they going to find out of hiei and kag's relationship!!! where's this stroy turning to? i love it update!
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Reviewed By: kagomeme2000 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 23, 2005 04:42 EST
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when am i going to find out Kagomes relationship with hiei!!!!!!!!! And When is Kurabara goonas find out that urimeshi is her brother!!!!!!!!!!! hes tooo goddamn slow!!!!!!!!!!!! Can you please improve your spelling
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Title: LOVE THIS!!!!XD
Reviewed By: crazy-punk-gurl [MediaMiner Member] On: February 07, 2005 01:43 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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This is fucking wonderful funny! I LOVE this so far! This is interesting and the characters aren't OOC! YAYNESS!!!XD Sorry, it's just really hard to find something original these days, anyway, love the idea of Yoko being in Kurama's head, classic. Hiei and Kagome have a relationship ne? ... hm, probably a sister/brother or a deep friendship they have. I just can't see Kag-chan as a lover to Hiei in here. Mrs. Higurashi and Atsuko... married? Now I've seen, er, read everything! I like how this is going and one question... Are you going to let Yusuke tell his friend about his new family or did they know already? Kinda confused on that but still good! UPDATE SOON PLEASE!!! *~*crazy-punk-gurl*~*
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Reviewed By: inuyashagirl5 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 16, 2004 19:27 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love it!! Please update soon!
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Reviewed By: deafening silence [MediaMiner Member] On: December 01, 2004 23:24 EST
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o.O Wow. kagome's mom...a lesbian...well, it's original! Anyway, this looks like its turning out to be a spectacular story. i can't wait for kagome and hiei to meet up again. I LOVE reunions like that!But what were they to each other? Hm....the possibilities....I a loving your portrayal of suuichi and youko's relationship. Youko makes me giggle ^_^ Well, i just wanted to tell you that you're doing a great job with keeping everyone in character, and i am going to implode if you don't get the next chappie up soon. And that would be messy. So get writing! Ja ne!
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Title: the real folk blues
Reviewed By: the beauty behind the mask [MediaMiner Member] On: October 31, 2004 12:32 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
love it update soon great fic!
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Reviewed By: baa baa black sheep On: October 20, 2004 10:12 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
nice up date soon!
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