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| "Dark" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Title: T.T
Reviewed By: Alpaca-kun On: March 05, 2005 16:56 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
that was WONDERFUL! I loved reading it, but do you think you could make the chapters longer? Even if it's just by combining two chapters into one? I only say this because the chapters felt reeaallyy short. Other than that, I loved it! Please, please, please, PLEASE write more! T.T
| Reviewed By: YamisuiOnna On: February 06, 2005 23:07 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
At first I thought: there isn't enough detail in this. Then I read on, and realized that the subtle way you portray your story's featured society and the nebulous threat of the "Front" serves to emphasize the wonderful character development. And such wonderful character development! You do an excellent job of portraying the odd relationship between the two girls, and I especially enjoyed the way you express so well the fact that Dark isn't fully human. Lesser authors would turn someone like her into some kind of Mary Sue, or some predictable heroine like in Alias or Dark Angel or one of *those* TV dramas that I won't touch with a ten-foot pole. Your Dark is wonderfully savage and mentally withdrawn. As for the plot, your chapter 7 certainly ends on a cliffhanger!
| Title: Whoa!
Reviewed By: Dee-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: October 25, 2004 10:50 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
The first sentence wasn't as clear as it could have been, but wow! What a great original story! You don't give everything away in the first chapter, so it adds a touch of suspense to this sci-fi adventure! I wish you only the best with this!
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