| "I won't leave" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] |
Reviewed By: MissNikki On: January 11, 2005 10:07 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
What the fuck?! You totally left me in the dark! It was mysterous and then more mystery and then it was over! Okay was he away at war or something..and why the fuck did no one like her? Was it because she was in love with an older man? And how much older was he than her? Come on you don't have to continue it...I mean that's the point of a oneshot but you could atleast answer my questions! I like the idea and the way you wrote it but you wrote so little and it didn't really connect any of the points that stood out, like the following, Kagome was disliked in school...why the fuck he left...what was the importance of the jacket? come on fill in the missing details. Love MN and you can reach me at Sweet_t_cocoa_86@yahoo.com
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Reviewed By: inu fan [MediaMiner Member] On: November 11, 2004 17:39 CST
Comment/Review:
He was in the army or something like that right? And the thing around his neck was one of those army tag, necklace, thingies right? I dunno. Anyway, that was really good!!
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Title: Cool
Reviewed By: Blackhawk On: October 21, 2004 22:24 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey that was good!!! I really think you should get back with Silver Rebel though. It was suck a good story, and you're suck a talented writer. Keep writting whatever you choos.
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Title: what...?
Reviewed By: kitera-matar On: October 21, 2004 13:09 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i love the writing style - it is disjointed and blurry on facts as if she is wandering thought a dream or a nightmare - good. maybe a bit more background on what happened would be good, a bit more drama to show the despair she is truely in before he shows up? i dunno - I LIKE IT! (what about the rebel?....) ~ME
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