| "Falling Orchid" Reviews/Comments [ 10 ] |
Reviewed By: Jukebox_csi [MediaMiner Member] On: November 26, 2004 13:56 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Interesting so far! I personally am a huge Yohji/Aya fan and generally prefer to read stories with that pairing. It makes more sense for Weiss to rescue him and have Yohji teach Ran that sex can be about love & equality not slavery. Though if you want to have Schwartz be rescuers of sorts you could maybe have Schwartz "leak" the info of the slave to their enemies to spite their boss Takatori.
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Reviewed By: The Chaotic Ones ~ not signed in On: November 20, 2004 01:47 CST
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this is great, the plot is that its different from the series, but simaler. Later on, Ran will be rescued by swartz, but only after meeting Persia through takatori. Thats a good plot right? write more soon please
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Reviewed By: Devil1 On: October 26, 2004 21:21 CDT
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Interesting, will be Yohji in this fic for rescue this lovely Ran?
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Reviewed By: blackoiuj On: October 26, 2004 17:08 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
it is really x 100000 good! its the best fic I have ever read! the paring for ran? I think U should do a ranXschuldig but ran being the uke! the swartz should rescu him and now u know what I think (my grammar really bad!)
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Reviewed By: Talyssa_ On: October 25, 2004 22:28 CDT
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You may want to either expand that second chapter or just make it part of your third chapter, it was WAY too short and didn't make any points. There also wasn't any kind of transition, even a vague one, from ran's first night as a slave to the second scene. you suggest that its a while afterwards but maybe a little more background would be nice. Anyway i think that although i DO like C/A or S/A (and sometimes F/A is beautifully done) it wouldn't really make sense for Schwartz to 'rescue' ran. one of them might want to steal him away, or take him off now and again for trysting, but a) they work for takatori and it would be unprofessional. Schwarz is nothing if not professional and b) they're not the type of people (with the possible exception of nagi) that would go around "rescuing" people. They don't care about other people, at least as far as i can see. but thats just my opinion, if you think you can make it work with a good storyline i'd be really interested to read it. I'll keep checking for more.
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Reviewed By: buenagirl13 On: October 25, 2004 21:38 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is very good and I'm really enjoying it. I'm a fan of Yohji x Ran but I also like Crawford x Ran; which I actually think would be better for this type of fic. Please continue... ^_^
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Reviewed By: bakurasgirl [MediaMiner Member] On: October 25, 2004 20:26 CDT
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This was good. A plot? If you have the one who is the submissive one find his way away from his abuser, that would work.
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Reviewed By: therapy On: October 25, 2004 14:27 CDT
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schwars should rescue ran!!!! and ran should be brad or schu or farfie's uke ^___^ they can be a foursome :p
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Reviewed By: NekoHope [MediaMiner Member] On: October 25, 2004 00:19 CDT
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Defnitely graphic.....I think Weiss should rescue him, and have Ran fall in love with Yohji! I'm a huge fan of Yotan/Ran.
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Reviewed By: bakurasgirl...not logged in On: October 24, 2004 14:05 CDT
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This was good. Very, very graphic that is for certain. Like it!
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