| "Torrential Binding" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] |
Reviewed By: Mala Darkling [MediaMiner Member] On: May 25, 2005 14:41 CDT
Comment/Review:
it's...haunting, somehow, and depressingly realistic when it comes to the emotions. Hakkai really punishes himself, huh? but I think deep down he loves them more than he realizes. I liked the mood and style of your writing, but there were excessive sentence fragmen, a few tense issues, and you may have used the passive voice a little too much. It would be nice if you could fix it so it was easier to read. Over all, though, its a great fic.
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Reviewed By: buenagirl [MediaMiner Member] On: December 22, 2004 10:52 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I just have to say one thing... WICKED !!! I loved it. Good work for your first time. ^_^ Please, do it again.
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Reviewed By: Blaqueluna [MediaMiner Member] On: October 31, 2004 12:21 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
For a first time yaoi ficcy....I have to say it's really great. Quite disturbing given the psychological thingies, but great nonetheless. ^.~ Keep it up, ne?
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