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Reviewed By: Horny Lit. Student On: February 02, 2005 13:35 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I absolutely love this story. My good memory, slightly perverted personality, and active imagination have made several passages from this story a frequent fixture in my masturbation fantasies. I'm hoping that through some sort of scheme on part of the Black sisters, even more witches (some possibilities: Tonks, Fleur, Hermione, etc.) will be added to Harry's harem. Either that, or they will eventually convince him to augment the slave bond. Hopefully, both will occur. The spelling and grammar mistakes are few and far between, and most of them are not obvious enough to be annoying. My only serious complaint is that the spacing in Chapter 6 is really messed up. The whole chapter is in the same large paragraph. Please try to fix this problem, or at the very least make sure that it is not repeated in future chapters
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Title: Chapter 6
Reviewed By: zaxxon [MediaMiner Member] On: February 01, 2005 11:04 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
The formatting was lost... but still a great chapter. Interesting having Hermione and her Witch's Oath. Nice that you settled the Snape/Harry issue.. It will be interesting to see if Cissa and/or Bella will see about "expanding" Harry's little harem... candidates would seem to be Nymphie Tonks and Hermione. Of course, I see H+Hr being the most realistic of any pairing out there. So I would love for Hermione's inclusion into Harry's harem. And we haven't even gotten to the school year yet... which should be interesting. Where will Cissa and Bella stay wehn Harry is at school? I can't see them accepting anywhere but with Harry, in Harry's bed/dorm. And of course, they can "help" Harry with his homework, or just help him relax. Then there's the reaction to his dormmates of this situation, all of Gryffindor, and of Hogwarts... especially, the Slytherin. Draco and Neville are the most interesting reactions... Bella and Cissa are his aunt and mother, bond to his rival/enemy. And Bella was among those that did what they did to his parents... I can just see Harry giving Neville some "time alone" with Bella... to "work" things out. What condition Bella would be in afterwards, I'm not sure... Although, he could just go with slavegirl Bella Black isn't Bellatrix Lestrange, giving some wizard view of this. Otder of the Phoenix, as it's been presented, seems more of a "club" of adult wizards, then a true militiant/fighting-back organization
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Reviewed By: The Master [MediaMiner Member] On: February 01, 2005 09:13 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love chapter 6 it was great. Keep up the great work. You are a great author.
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Reviewed By: kaja1234 (NLI) On: January 11, 2005 22:59 CST
Comment/Review:
I love this story!!!!! update soon!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: The Master [MediaMiner Member] On: December 20, 2004 11:08 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love chapter 4 it was great. Keep up the good work. You are a great author.
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Title: Chapter 4
Reviewed By: zaxxon [MediaMiner Member] On: December 20, 2004 08:50 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very, very good chapter... The Ministry "paperwork" should be intereting... as well as Harry's classmates re/actions to the situation... and the rest of the wizardary world as well. Although, Harry might be against (at first) he should collect all the Black females :) but then I love Harry-Has-a-Harem fics. Be interesting to see what Draco thinks of since his mom is now Harry's property... What of Sirus's will?
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Reviewed By: Robbie Byrd On: December 18, 2004 14:26 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I enjoyed reading your story. I liked the way you used the characters. And how you had them eact to each situation. I loved how you had them react to their character. Especially the when they made love to each other. I hope you will continue to add more to this story. And maybe write a sequel to it in the future.
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Reviewed By: SmacksKiller [MediaMiner Member] On: November 20, 2004 07:06 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I've was very surprised to see you on this website and even more to see chapter 3 here and not on ff.net. Any reason why?
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Title: Chapter 3
Reviewed By: zaxxon [MediaMiner Member] On: November 16, 2004 20:16 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
You see Harry, you're uncle is seeking for the other team." "You mean uncle Vernon's a…" Harry cringes and his butt automatically tenses up at the thought. "Yes, he's a poof." Seeking for the other team?Quadditch(sp?) reference, I take it. A poof? I thought that was a sound effect, not a term.
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Reviewed By: The Master [MediaMiner Member] On: November 16, 2004 09:05 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love chapter 3 it was great. Keep those chapters coming. You are an artist.
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Reviewed By: The Master [MediaMiner Member] On: November 05, 2004 11:16 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love chapter 2 it was great. Keep those chapters coming. You are an artist.
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Reviewed By: The Master [MediaMiner Member] On: November 05, 2004 11:15 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love chapter 1 it was great.
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Title: Chapter 1 Review
Reviewed By: zaxxon [MediaMiner Member] On: November 03, 2004 19:50 CST
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This is a great chapter, and interesting concept.
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Reviewed By: onilionheart On: November 02, 2004 23:33 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
ok u have a good plot going keep up the work updateupdateupdate
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Title: loved it
Reviewed By: DOOPLE On: October 30, 2004 19:55 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
loved it please update it was great!!!!!!!!!!dsfd
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