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| "Harry Potter and the Sisters Black" Reviews/Comments [ 23 ] | | Pages (2): [ 1 2 > » ] | Title: entire up-dated story
Reviewed By: Chrnocrusader On: September 17, 2005 22:30 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
The Single greatest story ever written.You are a true writer and you are with the best of the best. please continue writting and up-date this soon May the Force be with You
| Reviewed By: greebo45 On: July 06, 2005 23:38 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this is the best fanfic i've read keep it up
| Reviewed By: Saldeas On: July 05, 2005 15:04 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Excellent little ficlet, I can't wait to see more. You might be interested in checking your grammar and a little of your spelling though. You tend to switch between past and present tenses a bit. Other than that, very, very good.
| Reviewed By: honeybee On: April 27, 2005 01:10 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
i am loving the story so far, keep going, but i just can't stand the formatting. it is so hard to read and sometimes i get lost. please put spaces in there between paragraphs or anytihng. if not only for me to be able to read it better. thank a bunch. (smile)
| Title: Chpater 11
Reviewed By: Zaxxon [MediaMiner Member] On: April 15, 2005 08:13 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow... Not sure I would see Harry "sharing" with Dudley like that. I am as confused as Harry in regards to Petunia. But then canonly, I am unsure of Petunia as well. Although, spoilers for HBP states that Rowling has stated Petunia isn't a squib, she sure acts like one. As always, looking forward to more, and Draco and others reaction to the situation.
| Reviewed By: brookie On: March 21, 2005 00:37 CST
Comment/Review:
i love this story so much, i can't wait to read more/ keep posting. i am looking forward to what other stories you produce in the future!!! you are amazing man
| Reviewed By: Horny Lit Student On: March 16, 2005 07:38 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Formatting almost worked. It didn't, but it was still better than last time. As to the chapter and story themselves: you are having Harry live what is the premier sexual fantasy of most teen and twenty-something males, and you are doing it flawlessly. Let's see; a blond, a brunette, a raven hair, and an any color. The only one missing is a redhead to complete the color spectrum. Using Ginny would piss Ron off even more, as well as throw Harry out of favor with the entire Weasley family, except for possibly Fred & George, who after cooling off, would probably find it amusing. However, I'm not completely convinced you could find a credible way to induct Ginny into Harry's harem (that was a challenge, by the way), but it would be nice. Plus, five just sounds so much better than four, being a prime number and all. Tonks: it's strange, but I don't often read sex stories about Tonks where she uses her abilities as a metamorph to enhance the act. I will admit that I've thought of the possibilities, and it shocks me that so few authors take advantage of them. You, however, used her power in a way I hadn't thought of. I was just thinking about her changing her looks to please her master; I never considered the tongue thing, but now that I imagine it... I wonder how Hermione's parents will react to the news. Ooh, the possibilities, the wondrous possibilities... Well, I guess what I'm trying to get to is... My hat's off to you, and try to write a little faster. See ya
| Reviewed By: Horny Lit Student On: March 09, 2005 19:33 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
So, when do you plan to continue? Come on, I'm getting bored.
| Reviewed By: Horny Lit. Student On: February 02, 2005 13:35 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I absolutely love this story. My good memory, slightly perverted personality, and active imagination have made several passages from this story a frequent fixture in my masturbation fantasies. I'm hoping that through some sort of scheme on part of the Black sisters, even more witches (some possibilities: Tonks, Fleur, Hermione, etc.) will be added to Harry's harem. Either that, or they will eventually convince him to augment the slave bond. Hopefully, both will occur. The spelling and grammar mistakes are few and far between, and most of them are not obvious enough to be annoying. My only serious complaint is that the spacing in Chapter 6 is really messed up. The whole chapter is in the same large paragraph. Please try to fix this problem, or at the very least make sure that it is not repeated in future chapters
| Title: Chapter 6
Reviewed By: zaxxon [MediaMiner Member] On: February 01, 2005 11:04 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
The formatting was lost... but still a great chapter. Interesting having Hermione and her Witch's Oath. Nice that you settled the Snape/Harry issue.. It will be interesting to see if Cissa and/or Bella will see about "expanding" Harry's little harem... candidates would seem to be Nymphie Tonks and Hermione. Of course, I see H+Hr being the most realistic of any pairing out there. So I would love for Hermione's inclusion into Harry's harem. And we haven't even gotten to the school year yet... which should be interesting. Where will Cissa and Bella stay wehn Harry is at school? I can't see them accepting anywhere but with Harry, in Harry's bed/dorm. And of course, they can "help" Harry with his homework, or just help him relax. Then there's the reaction to his dormmates of this situation, all of Gryffindor, and of Hogwarts... especially, the Slytherin. Draco and Neville are the most interesting reactions... Bella and Cissa are his aunt and mother, bond to his rival/enemy. And Bella was among those that did what they did to his parents... I can just see Harry giving Neville some "time alone" with Bella... to "work" things out. What condition Bella would be in afterwards, I'm not sure... Although, he could just go with slavegirl Bella Black isn't Bellatrix Lestrange, giving some wizard view of this. Otder of the Phoenix, as it's been presented, seems more of a "club" of adult wizards, then a true militiant/fighting-back organization
| Reviewed By: The Master [MediaMiner Member] On: February 01, 2005 09:13 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love chapter 6 it was great. Keep up the great work. You are a great author.
| Reviewed By: kaja1234 (NLI) On: January 11, 2005 22:59 CST
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I love this story!!!!! update soon!!!!!!
| Reviewed By: The Master [MediaMiner Member] On: December 20, 2004 11:08 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love chapter 4 it was great. Keep up the good work. You are a great author.
| Title: Chapter 4
Reviewed By: zaxxon [MediaMiner Member] On: December 20, 2004 08:50 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very, very good chapter... The Ministry "paperwork" should be intereting... as well as Harry's classmates re/actions to the situation... and the rest of the wizardary world as well. Although, Harry might be against (at first) he should collect all the Black females :) but then I love Harry-Has-a-Harem fics. Be interesting to see what Draco thinks of since his mom is now Harry's property... What of Sirus's will?
| Reviewed By: Robbie Byrd On: December 18, 2004 14:26 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I enjoyed reading your story. I liked the way you used the characters. And how you had them eact to each situation. I loved how you had them react to their character. Especially the when they made love to each other. I hope you will continue to add more to this story. And maybe write a sequel to it in the future.
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