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| "Spring Rain" Reviews/Comments [ 32 ] | | Pages (3): [ 1 2 3 › » ] | Title: okay, i'm good no--**stuttered inhale**--now...
Reviewed By: iloveanimecartoons [MediaMiner Member] On: June 12, 2007 17:59 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I think I need to invent a new word to describe this...okay, I got nuffin'. **pouts and kicks a rock** It was prettyful...nah, that just SUCKS! It was like so on point and so in touch with their inner demons, plights, fears, insecurities, desires...they really love each other, so much. Unrequited, for so long, it HAD to happen. Miroku is in such a bind, wanting to 'be around' to be with her, and Sango, she's so fragile, emotionally, right now. But she wants him in her life. Oldschool propriety and traditions, upbringing and training, most likely was her foundation to be a strong, confident, wise tajiya--doesn't teach much on intimacy, I'd imagine. Makes me wonder if Sango had a mother around, before the decimation of her village. Sango is so unprepared for love, but wants it so much, not just to fill a void, but because she's a woman and she's not BLIND, daggit! LOL! Miroku and that wind tunnel--I could see how that would make him hesitant to get involved with anyone. After all that he's been through, a lifetime of anxiety and forced optimism, when deep inside, he's always worried he won't defeat Naraku in time to end the curse, therefore sparing his life. I can just FEEL the guilt he wars with inside, the very THOUGHT of leaving a wife a young widow and a child fatherless--especially in THOSE times of war and calmaity. The introspections were so deep...'amn, Sue! I FELT them...my chest tightened up! (GAWD, I hate getting all weepy in public! But, I did! It was a good little sniffle, though.) Wow...that's all i can think to say right now. Yeah...just...WOW!!!!!!!!
| Title: wow...this was...
Reviewed By: iloveanimecartoons [MediaMiner Member] On: June 12, 2007 17:46 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
**wrings hands** it was just so very... **wipes tears** so...it was really, really, really... **eye twitch** I...I'll get back to you on it **sniffle**
| Reviewed By: pookymoni On: June 02, 2005 03:38 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I read this about thirty minutes ago and forgot to review it because I had to make my mom some coffeee(long story)so now i'm reviewing it and i wanted to say that it was great #1. Because there really aren't that many stories that have to do with sango and miroku's feelings #2.sango and miroku's outlook on everything was great!
| Reviewed By: Odoriko chan On: May 17, 2005 14:40 CDT
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oh, you've outdone yourself here. There's only one thing I can say: beautiful. Simply beautiful.
| Reviewed By: nerwenfaelvirin [MediaMiner Member] On: May 17, 2005 00:52 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was so sweet. My chest ached from wanting to cry because it was so sweet. So beautiful.
| Reviewed By: Dark Avenger [MediaMiner Member] On: May 10, 2005 22:45 CDT
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Sue, your story left me breathless... it was beautiful, pulling and ripping at my own emotions as the characters battled with their own. I'm truly impressed. And the unspoken bonds were absolutely heart felt. Unspoken words are often the sweetest, it's something I live by.
| Title: FFARG Review
Reviewed By: Lady_Yukiko not signed in On: April 03, 2005 18:20 CDT
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Ooo, I enjoyed this story. Reading a M/S story in which both characters stay "in-character" is rare for me. Somehow you've managed to keep the tone of the story serious yet fluffy at the same time, something which I find hard to do. Overall the story was great, although I'm not sure InuYasha would tell Miroku to tell Sango about his feelings, just doesn't seem like a Yasha thing to do. But I think the way you wrote that scene made it believable so in the end that part's fine.
| Title: sweet
Reviewed By: Deep Serenity [MediaMiner Member] On: March 30, 2005 08:25 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ah, that was sweet, I think I like these to the most, good one shot
| Title: FFARG Review
Reviewed By: Chibi Halo [MediaMiner Member] On: March 13, 2005 23:44 CST
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Time to nit pick because Sue wants it. First off let me just tell you how much I enjoyed this story. You kept Miroku and Sango in character and yet explored the romance between them. You even present the internal dilema Sango goes through with her love for her brother and the need to get the last few shards very well. You have a great sense of prose and the written word. It's refreshing to read s piece done by an author that takes the time to research their characters and the world they come from. That said I do have one little thing that kept bringing a flag up in my mind. When Miroku thinks back to the night he and Inuyasha are discussing his relationship with Sango I found it hard to believe Inuyasha would willingly tell Miroku to go and tell Sango how he fells about her. To me it just seemed so unlike him to talk about someone's relationship when he has trouble admitting his own feelings about Kagome and Kikyo. Maybe he would be that way but he seemed a little off there to me. Other than that it was an enjoyable read.
| Title: Insightful
Reviewed By: MaginMan [MediaMiner Member] On: March 09, 2005 12:10 CST
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I have always believed there was so much more to Miroku than meets the eye, and I am glad to find someone that can so masterfully sum up that depth. Seriously, it is only too easy to read the emotions in Kagome and Inuyasha; even Sango tends to be an open book (she's still my girl though). Also, it's good to see Sango and Miroku in one of your stories now and then where they don't get written out or have a miscarriage. I was starting to think you might actually hate these guys for some reason. Well great as always; thanks for the memories.
| Reviewed By: suzehowe [MediaMiner Member] On: March 07, 2005 17:24 CST
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I just love this little story more and more every time I read it. I have to admit that I took Miroku's "wandering hand" at face value, and never really thought about why he might continue to do it after (obviously) falling for Sango. Your insight into his character is astounding. I don't think I'll ever see his groping in quite the same way! You've got some absolutely classic lines here...when Miroku says that he's "just a man", my heart just melts. ::sigh:: And as for the "nit-pickers" - for gods sake, don't you have anything *better* to do??? Sheesh...
| Reviewed By: Washuu Ogami On: March 07, 2005 17:00 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You certainly have revealed the core of Sango and Miroku's feeling for another, the entire range. Beautiful, vividly painted job. Your metaphors, as usual, are elegant and provocative. Poetic license is a weapon you wield well, prompting me to hope for update and new project alerts upon logging on. :) On a less stellar note, the ludicrous nit-picking is precisely that! These people should a)attempt writing themselves to get a better handle on the process, and more importantly b)remember to be *grateful* authors subject themselves to the occasional,inevitable darts. This prolific sub-culture termed "fanfic" thrives from the writers who expend so much time, research, energy, *blood*--you are a perfect example of how the quality bar's raised to equal and surpass anything in the bookstores! And...how well too many of us recall when fanfic 'twas sparse,virtually impossible to come by unless attending a rare convention. Arigatou for all your marvelous efforts, your works truly make a tremendous difference!! :)
| Reviewed By: yuyu-inuyashaluva [MediaMiner Member] On: March 07, 2005 14:46 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
thats so sweet!!!
| Title: FFARG Review
Reviewed By: Flame Of Ice [MediaMiner Member] On: March 07, 2005 12:31 CST
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You haven't really said whether Miroku is sitting or standing in the entire fic, which made the "she dropped to her knees...taking his hands in hers" a bit jarring and hard to visualise. You have an odd sentence in which you change tenses "He lifted his face...letting it soothe...,let it wash away...wishing". When you say "That was too harsh", I didn't get what the "that" was. Define. And lastly, in "she looked like she wanted to say something but thought better of it" but is the wrong word because it seperates the "looked like" from the second part of the sentence, and makes it seem like Sango knows Kagome thought better of it. Other than allllll(hehe) those tiny tiny mistakes , it's a damn good fic stylistically. Now Stop laughing at my pickiness. :P
| Title: FFARG Review
Reviewed By: Flame Of Ice [MediaMiner Member] On: March 07, 2005 11:54 CST
Comment/Review:
I love your stories, even if I don't know Inuyasha ^_^. Very creative, very vivid, very hard to spot mistakes in! So I pick at tiny stuff. 1. "sadness emitting from her in psychic waves" is creative, but sounds far too ... Physics. 2. Connections. You've used commas to put together two ideas that aren't connected very strongly in the same sentence in places like "always an outsider, the last of her people..." Here, the comma is not the best connector. "cleanse the earth and replenish the streams and rivers" doesn't work because replenishing doesn't have anything to do with the main point of the subject, which is comparison to the "dispel[ling of] the images of Sango's smile". You've made Sango "let go of her weapon. It crashed to the earth", but earlier, you stated that she "let Hiraikotsu drop against the ground with a dull thump". Now, it could be just against her shoulder, but you didn't say. "she let him cover his mouth with his, he nearly moaned..." If you want, you could change this a bit to keep it as one sentence, but here it looks like the comma should be a peroid. When "he tightened his grip on her hands", it should be followed by "and her fingers wrapped around his thumb", not a comma, because it's a subsequent action. Also, the fingers are not "like an infant" (unless they're really really chubby ;) ). In the last sentence of the same paragraph, you need to watch your commas again, between "a weak laugh as they drew apart, Miroku dropped his forehead" (continued)
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