| "A Demon's Broken Spirit" Reviews/Comments [ 6 ] |
Title: articuno13
Reviewed By: articuno13 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 07, 2007 23:51 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
jup continue!
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Title: wow
Reviewed By: serena_kolapop2001 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 26, 2004 22:52 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i love this pairing! you should continue with it for sure!!!
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Reviewed By: EV On: November 21, 2004 04:22 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great Beginning. You should definitely continue this. I Love this pairing. Hope you update soon!
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Reviewed By: impure On: November 05, 2004 19:32 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 2 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story incorporates all the necesary components needed for a decent abuse/recovery fic that could b very intriguing if not for the unrealistic quality of writing used in it. Ur style is blatant, blunt, and not captivating (srry to say--dont mean to sound cruel. Tips: many successful pics have had the element of suspense embedded in their chapters. Instead of saying "Treize didn't think that that should happen to anyone" (i noe that's prob'ly not word for word) say "the thought that such an act would be used against someone--no matter what side they were on--chilled Treize to the bones and made his heart skip a beat." My redo is exTREmely cliche, i know, but sumthin to that effect would make ur story MUCH more interesting. Also, don't forget ur grammar--';' are ur friends! lol. um...so ya. i would LOVE to seriously read a story that is entitled to the AMAZING summary u wrote to attract reader's attention! only, i have yet to find such a story. carefully critique ur next chapter and u'll b sure to get much more positive feedback from a wider mass of ppl.
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Title: hey
Reviewed By: Sivy On: November 03, 2004 14:49 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey, curious as to what happens next... obviously you have a 13x2 to deal with. I am wondering how that will work.
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Reviewed By: Vidalark [MediaMiner Member] On: November 03, 2004 03:30 CST
Comment/Review:
I don't know why but I always love a good Do torture fic and he is my fav. I am really enjoying this and can't wait for more.
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