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| "The clashes of times" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Reviewed By: Tranquility_Goddess [MediaMiner Member] On: November 10, 2004 21:17 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 2 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm sorry I had to give low ratings, but you've made a few common mistakes with the "you're" "your" thing. "You're" means 'you are,' while "your" means the possessive form, the same as "it's" ('it is') and "its." The grammar's really poor, and since you're a first-timer, its off this time; I'm sorry, but grammar is something like perfection to me. And, by the way...you really have kept the characters 'personality,' but I just don't get their feel, you know? I need to feel a character before I can read it.
[ Request Review Removal ] | Reviewed By: I dont feel like registering On: November 09, 2004 22:33 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey I think youre fic is great, especialy for a first timer, I realy like the idea of someone other than Kagome passing through the well. You realy keep the character's personality, a rare thing in most of the fics I've seen keep up the good work
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