Reviewed By: Vuirneen... On: November 11, 2004 08:23 CST
Comment/Review:
I'm surprised, because although the grammar was quite good, you switched tenses many times. Please decide if it's set in the present tense or the past and rewrite. It was quite short and I'm not sure that it really fits the title, since it's about Thatz and he never said "You worry too much, Rune". Rune didn't seem particularly worried, either. Maybe this'll change if there are further chapters? Anyway, it's nice to see that even happy-go-lucky theives have down moments. We know that from Thatz's nature they won't last.
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