Reviewed By: tngsorensen [MediaMiner Member] On: January 30, 2005 23:10 CST Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10 Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review: I liked this a lot. I read about the beach incident as well, but it never got the gears rolling for me as it did for you. Good job following it up. Also, I think your portrayal of the Mazoku was very in character. I know this is just a one-shot, but I hope you might be able to flesh it out a bit more. Not add chapters to it--I don't mean that. Maybe being a little more on the descriptive side would help.
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