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| "Beyond All Expectations" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Reviewed By: Elenek [MediaMiner Member] On: November 28, 2005 20:13 CST
Comment/Review:
Stylewise, this is really well written and easy to read. Your first chapter was extremely solid. The others, hovever, got progressively less so. I thought the story got a little fluffy after the first chapter. I would have liked to have seen more of the angst and drama that you set up. You also stopped including a lot of the description that hooked me during the first chapter. Formatting: You might want to put more of a divider between the end of the author's note and the beginning of the chapter. There are a lot of readers out there like me who either scan or skip the author's notes looking for the beginning of the chapter. Overall, this was well written and I look forward to seeing more work from you. -El-
| Title: wowza
Reviewed By: Robert Montz On: July 27, 2005 15:35 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was very good i liked it.Please make another one i loved it!man that was good!Plus u had Yamcha i like yamcha!
| Title: Awesomeness!
Reviewed By: Namek Kaia [MediaMiner Member] On: December 17, 2004 12:23 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow... I like it. I really really like it. I was suprised at how much your writing style and language has changed for this one. It's awesome! Sometimes you got wordy (but who am I to talk, right? lol) and there were minor passable errors, but it didn't effect my opinion of the chapter whatsoever. I think you've really got something going here! And I can't wait to read more. I know what kind of fic this is, and I thought it was VERY coincidental that she was young and blonde, so I can guess where you're going with it, but I'm oh so anxious to read more! You're posting the next chapter tonight, right? lol. Just kidding. Let me know if you need me to beta for you! Not that you really need me. This is so great all on its own!! Good work, chica. I'm really enjoying it. Keep 'em coming! ~ NaK ~
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