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| "Virus" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] | Reviewed By: Darth-Pyro On: September 07, 2005 18:57 CDT
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SCREW YOU YOH please update its been 3 months come on im begging you the story rocks i just wish there would be a fe more battles other then that it RULES keep up the good work
| Reviewed By: Hanami_the_Tsunami [MediaMiner Member] On: May 08, 2005 11:52 CDT
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This is an incredibly well-written story! 'Virus' has opened a whole new world of peril, adventure, and great storytelling. I applaud you. Your spelling and grammar are very expanded, and you have a firm grasp of English. You might want to use a few diffent synonyms for other words, just to add a bit more spice to the story vocabulary. (Ex- I look for synonyms in my Thesaurus.) The originality of 'Virus' is astounding to me. The way your story is written, this kind of problem could be possible in the .hack// worlds. However, what the coward Yoh! wrote about time flow is somewhat right. Maybe you could include a few more battles to make up for time traveling to other servers, levels and whatnot. Although I don't know much of the .hack// worlds, this story got me to finally understand .hack// a little more. ~Hopefully this didn't sound like an insult. Yours truly, Hanami
| Reviewed By: Tears of Griever [MediaMiner Member] On: April 24, 2005 19:02 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Don't listen to Yoh!, I think the story was very interesting! Keep it up, please, I am begging you! It's totally awesome! Update soon. It's cool that you came up with an idea like that!
| Reviewed By: Yoh! On: January 21, 2005 09:43 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
Er, it's a good story, but not for me really. Just not...grand enough. It moves quickly without covering the little incidents that are bound to uccor in real life. More like musings than a story
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