Reviewed By: w_j [MediaMiner Member] On: November 26, 2004 06:27 CST
Comment/Review:
Your story is okay, but I don't understand how Inuyasha went from being human in the bathtub (black hair, dark eyes, and regular hands) to being hanyou (silver hair, amber eyes, and claws) a short time later during the lemon scene. I think that was a mistake in your descriptions. If he has transformed back to hanyou before sunrise for some reason, then you need to explain why it happened. Thanks.
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