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Title: :)
Reviewed By: dk1022 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 22, 2006 00:00 CDT
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I¡¦m really enjoying this fic. I like the writing style and content. The dream sequence was a little shocking. ƒº (not what I was expecting but it defiantly has appeal). I love surprises. Hehehe. The last chapter with the ¡§haunted house¡¨ definitely creped me out a little about my closet¡K.which is right next to my bed. The only thing I would like to suggest is that you tie it in with the other chapters a little more. I almost felt like I was reading a completely new fic. You could do this by adding in a short segment on Kagome¡¦s reaction to the dream or another little part of what is happening with Koga. Keep up the wonderful work. I look forward to seeing what happens next.
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Reviewed By: OrlandoLover [MediaMiner Member] On: May 23, 2006 19:11 CDT
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wow wow wow wow wow wow i looooooooove the story... it has great suspense, so u gotta hurry up and write more cause the suspense is killing me...Cheers
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Reviewed By: toolazytologin On: May 05, 2006 22:14 CDT
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This is going to seem a little harsh, but it's not meant to be a flame. First, just a little nitpick. The United States doesn't exist in Inuyasha's time. Kagome's time is 1997 (according to the manga), so even if she's going back EXACTLY 500 years, it's only been 5 years since Columbus landed at South America, (the United States didn't even become the United States until 200 years after Inuyasha takes place) and considering how isolated Japan was from foreigners, it's unlikely that any Western couple would live there. And when you take into account that the Western family lived there 100 years before Kagome and everyone gets there the whole thing makes even less sense. And yes, Ju-on was a cool movie, but why try to rip it off in the middle of a story that's about Kouga essentially trying to date rape Kagome with a mystical diamond? It makes no sense. It doesn't advance the plot in anyway, it won't develop the characters. Before this was a pretty decent story, but now it's like you just rented The Grudge and decided it might be cool to put in your story because you had writer's block.
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Reviewed By: angel_of_hope [MediaMiner Member] On: March 20, 2006 14:34 CST
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Besides some of the bad grammar, the story is okay. I hope you keep updating.
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Title: no you didn't
Reviewed By: mama of reviews On: February 10, 2006 21:30 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 3 of 10
Overall Rating: 4 of 10 Comment/Review:
first you drew me in with a fake summary about i think kagome turning demon....um excuse me where the fuck the demon at i don't see it maybe i should wait or read another fic. you lost me in the begging then it got a little better only at her dream other than that this story sucks. maybe you would have had something with the dream then all this other crap. p.s. you deserve this flaming review for what you did to a would be good fanfiction. sorry :(
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Title: hey ho hey ho
Reviewed By: sesshomarugrl aka sesshywife On: February 10, 2006 21:22 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i like the story so far but you would be better off sticking with the inu/kag side then giving koga any kind of moral in the story i mean he shouldn't even have a story in the series. he's just a mangy mutt who is in love with kagome when she told his dumb ass she don't love him. oh well take my advice i love the story update soon my fellow now fav author
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Reviewed By: die4InuYasha [MediaMiner Member] On: February 10, 2006 17:45 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story is very interesting plz keep going!
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Reviewed By: dudekiller(nsi) On: February 10, 2006 16:11 CST
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this is a really cool story so far. please update soon.
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Reviewed By: ej On: February 10, 2006 14:57 CST
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u suck. srry, good idea, bad flow. srry, but it seems so...stiff. luv ya! despite yur hate for me!
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Title: You Have Been Reviewed
Reviewed By: You Have Been Reviewed [MediaMiner Member] On: January 10, 2006 21:35 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 2 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story is riddled from top to bottom with problems. From the listing down through the last page, technical errors run rampant. The most blatant problem is run-on sentences, but the errors run the gamut from simple comma faults to word useage errors to attempts to use flowery description that ends up mangling the meaning and flow of the sentence. This fic is listed as Romance/Hentai/Supernatural for the genres and Original for the type. It's an InuYasha fan fic, so it's obviously not an Original fic. I really, really wish someone would explain to writers exactly what an Original fic is - I didn't realize it was that hard to understand. I discovered after reading the story that the story summary is also deceptive; the way it read to me, it suggested a yaoi story with a Kouga/InuYasha pairing. Instead, the story continues down the InuYasha/Kagome path. Disclaimer: Roses are red, Violets are blue. I no own, so you no sue. Lovely - poetic baby talk in the first line of the fic. This is so promising for the quality of the story that it's probably turned off a number of potential readers already. A full moon shown down moon the beautiful landscape, caressing it with its unholy blue light. The full moon shone, the past tense of shine. Shown is the past tense of show. The full review of this fic can be found at: http://www.livejournal.com/users/uvebeenreviewed/2118.html
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Title: hurrie !!!!
Reviewed By: savii [MediaMiner Member] On: May 09, 2005 20:30 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
UPDATE SOON !!!1 CANT WAIT FOR THE NEXT CHAPTER !!!! KEEP ROCKIN IT
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Reviewed By: MyogaM34 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 07, 2005 16:52 CST
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This story is awesome!! PLEASE UPDATE SOON!!!! ^_^
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Reviewed By: FataLFelineOfTheNight [MediaMiner Member] On: December 28, 2004 11:09 CST
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this story rox! cant wait 4 future updates! wat happened?
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Title: Diamonds Are A Girl's Best Friend
Reviewed By: Megan Consoer [MediaMiner Member] On: December 27, 2004 23:01 CST
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I really like this story alot. Can you write some more chapters?
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Title: Diamonds Are A Girl's Best Friend
Reviewed By: Megan Consoer [MediaMiner Member] On: December 26, 2004 23:24 CST
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I really like this story alot. Can you write some more chapters?
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