| "The Magic of Spring" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] |
Title: 1st lemon chapter
Reviewed By: hanyouchris [MediaMiner Member] On: February 16, 2005 14:36 CST
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First of all, if it wasn't kagome's first time, then why did she have a barrier? even if before they had sex and inu-yasha didn't break the barrier, then the wouldn't be pregnant. she acted too naive for it NOT to be her first time either. UPDATE!! its been what, almost a month now? what happened to the daily updates?
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Reviewed By: MyogaM34 (not logged in) On: January 27, 2005 13:47 CST
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What the fuck?? What the hell is Sesshomaru thinking? Why doesn't he mate with rin?? Oh well, Great Update!! Update Soon!! ^_^
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Reviewed By: Zirra Nova [MediaMiner Member] On: January 27, 2005 06:45 CST
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Oh no, man sessy is being such an ass. i'd write more but i gotta go, Zirra.
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Title: Not Bad.
Reviewed By: Zero X [MediaMiner Member] On: January 15, 2005 20:12 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
A Really boogd fic. There were only 2 things that I noticed. One, You should have spread the story out more. It was enjoyable, just a bit too fast paced. And Two, No offense, but I have to laugh at this. This is the first time I've seen someone use the chapter summary section to actually WRITE the chapter! You've got a great story here,Try making a sequal!^_^
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Title: me 1st one! yay!
Reviewed By: bubbles-sama [MediaMiner Member] On: January 07, 2005 22:45 CST
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Don't ya love lemons? I DO!!!!! ^_~ You might want to either combine chapters, or just write more so they won't turn out as short (I'm gonna sound like an english teacher so sorry about that). Maybe elaborate more and stuff but good job! Nice lemon scene...when I read the last part of this chapter I was laughing my ass off! Good comic relief too.
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