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| "A New Adventure" Reviews/Comments [ 10 ] | Reviewed By: fanficmaster [MediaMiner Member] On: June 27, 2007 18:04 CDT
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You should put a lemon with Gohan and videl. That would make it a little more interesting. But I like the ending. I am a big fan for Gohan and Videl pairings. This was very good!
| Reviewed By: Dacheran [MediaMiner Member] On: June 04, 2005 04:50 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very nice... I'm normally not a fan of Gohan, but I actually like your story. It seems to me that a lot of people try to make him a lot more badass than he is in the actual show... but this is the only fic I've read where it really seems to work. You also do a nice job of pacing, though some story elements are awkward... such as the Crane Gang getting enhanced by ZDNA. And Goten and Trunks being born without tails... Also you had quite a few typos and awkward sentences, but it's not hard to figure out what you're trying to say. It was a great read and I have to say I'm sorry to see that the next chapter isn't up yet... can't wait untill you come with it, thanks.
| Reviewed By: Prophetagain [MediaMiner Member] On: March 30, 2005 22:02 CST
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Really good cant wait till u get to the romance of videl and gohan.
| Reviewed By: delariean [MediaMiner Member] On: March 30, 2005 21:40 CST
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Great fic! However I dont think this is an NC17 flick...unless you plan to add a lemon or two...I really think this is a rated r flick at least......
| Reviewed By: Koaitan Princess [MediaMiner Member] On: February 26, 2005 17:01 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Bravo! Those last few chapters were really, really, really great. There were a few spelling errors, nothing major. Sorry it's taken so long to review, but I've been fighting to find free time between work, school, and family. I would also like to thank you for continuing your fic, alot of writers give up when they come upon their first case of writers block. I'm just having technical difficulties with my fic, for the most part it's already written, just on another computer that won't let me save anything to a disk. Anyways, as usual, sorry for all the rambling, keep up the good work, and I'm looking forward to the next update, so please do so ASAP. Ja'ne
| Title: Prince of Sayians
Reviewed By: Prince of Sayians [MediaMiner Member] On: February 10, 2005 15:21 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very good fanfic. I look foreward to your next chapter. Please make your chapters longer next time.
| Reviewed By: Koaitan Princess [MediaMiner Member] On: January 28, 2005 00:12 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, those were some really good chapters. Keep up the great work. I'd also like to appoligize for not reviewing in quite awhile. My life has been very hectic and confusing lately, right now I couldn't tell up from down, left from right.....anyways, thanks for updating so often, and not getting discoureged from people not reviewing. I figure if I"m going to take my time to read it, then I can at least give the writer some encouregment or constructive criticism. Well, I'm going to quit my babbling now. Please update soon. Ja'ne Koaitan Princess
| Reviewed By: Koaitan Princess [MediaMiner Member] On: January 11, 2005 22:02 CST
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good chapter. Please don't get discoureged with the lack of reviews, I have the same problem, but I also have several others that have kept me form updating. Anyways, there were alot of spelling/grammer errors, but it was still pretty easy to read. Keep up the good work, and please update soon.
| Reviewed By: Koaitan Princess [MediaMiner Member] On: December 15, 2004 18:18 CST
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
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Good chapter 4. I thought something might happen with the Crane gang at the carnival,thank you for out smarting me. Most of the time when I predict that a certain event might happen in a story, it usually does. I noticed some spelling errors and also some mis-use of tense(get, got, getting) that type of thing, nothing to bad though. Keep up the good work, and I'm looking forward to an update. Oh, and I like the way that Gohan picked up a few traits from Veggie. Good Job.
| Reviewed By: Koaitan Princess [MediaMiner Member] On: December 14, 2004 22:38 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good fic. Man, those are some long chapters. It's a good thing though. Anyways, I'm on chapter 4, but I hope to see an update soon, this seems like it's gonna be a really great fic. Keep up the good work. Ja'ne
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