| "You Must Die" Reviews/Comments [ 6 ] |
Title: Black princess
Reviewed By: Kurama or Hiei Both Great Boy Toys [MediaMiner Member] On: January 07, 2005 21:18 CST
Comment/Review:
in very pleased with the way the story came out i would even be more pleased ifffffffffffff i flierted wiht HIEI more and a little wiht kurama my baby for ever ane eturnety along wiht hiei and tsume ans vegeta and kiba and mybe ken im kinda tired of ken any waysssssssss ya ok bu bye
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Title: juju8839
Reviewed By: juju8839 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 27, 2004 16:39 CST
Comment/Review:
hello again. seems that I am not the only one responding to your story now.... anyway dont know what else to say but keep it up. ( u must be sooo bored hearing me talk to ya now... hope not though.. keep on writing...
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Title: ...?
Reviewed By: KitsuneSilver [MediaMiner Member] On: December 26, 2004 22:40 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm debating whether to mention the severe lack of commas, the absolute overload of dialogue compared to the annoying lack of description, or the fact that you definitely overdo Kuwabara's stupidity. Oh, there go all three. Most bothersome is the fact that you have Kuwabara say something "stupidly." He's not stupid at all. He's just not as strong or as experienced as the other three Tantei; he may not catch on to Makai concepts as quickly. What's all this about Kurama's love? I have a vision telling me the idea is cliché and boring. Which, of course, it is. A tad bit of advice: think up your own plot ideas. Get original. Think outside the box. It'll be interesting, or at least more so than this is. I promise.
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Title: juju8839
Reviewed By: juju8839 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 24, 2004 11:08 CST
Comment/Review:
soooo... what can I say now... (hnnn) ok here goes. thank u again for dedicating that story to me. It was shocking to find out that yumi its hearts but hey!! its just a story.. what I am querios about is who the guy with wings that kidnapped her. (was it KUROUNu Kurama's old friend ) who knows excepts u... the story still ccaught my interest since I am still reading rigth!!??? so keep on writting. the more surprises the more I read.. HAVE A MERRY CHRISTMAS!!!!!! wish Hiei a merry christmas too. I have the hot's for him... (hihihihihih)
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Title: juju8839
Reviewed By: juju8839 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 23, 2004 20:08 CST
Comment/Review:
Hello Hello!!! thank u for dedicating that story to me "blush blush" u have made me so happy I started dancing in my room to sailor moon music.. anywau I enjoyed that part of the story it is very interesting.. It makes me wonder what yumi will do to get her revenge... the only thing that was hard for me to do was understad some stuff sdue to spelling errors.. but dont let this put yah!! down we aint all spelling "Wizzes" (take me for example I've been wondering for years why my report card says A's or b's and I know I cant spell have of the english language stuff.... and pluss GERMAN!!! ( I always confuse the spelling of english and german) Dont let me even get started on Spanish ( gesh!! its like war in my brain for dominans over language and it seems so far none winning!!! anyway I know I running on but hey I seem to be the only one talking to yah!!! (bwahahahahah)^-^ ^_^ the story is good... I still enjoy it..plzz keep on going so I have some thing to do over the christmas and new years break... thanxxxx....
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Title: juju8839
Reviewed By: juju8839 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 22, 2004 11:31 CST
Comment/Review:
HaHaHaHA... YAH u CAUght me.. I am just one of those lazy people who doesnt like to write but reads the stuff.. any way ur story is good, I like it.. so Keep ON GOING i WOULD LIKE TO KNOW MORE ABOUT THEIR love life.. OHHH!! one more thing... keep up the good work!!!!!!!!!!! ^-^
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