| "To get away" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] |
Reviewed By: Rainstorm61879 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 12, 2005 09:06 CDT
Comment/Review:
I'm sorry but your story is..rather...choppy...this is not a flame just gentle critcism. It moves by in leaps and bounds. It has a very jerky dialogue. It's like being trapped in a car with a student driver. It leaves a feeling of disorientation and motion sickness. I don't mean to be offensive but your style could use some work. Just so you know I don't think I'm better at writing I just think you need to hear that. Really sorry I don't like writing bad reviews but honesty is better than sucking up
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Reviewed By: Crimson Suns [MediaMiner Member] On: January 09, 2005 13:46 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
uh.... hm.... good... job? I like it, I really do. but where does the Yu Yu Hakusho part come in? And I'm guessing that this is a naraku/OC thing. just a geuss. ^-^, please update. i cant wait!!!
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Title: To Get Away
Reviewed By: Megan Consoer [MediaMiner Member] On: December 27, 2004 20:09 CST
Comment/Review:
I really like this story alot. Can you write some more chapters?
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