Title: Wha??
Reviewed By: starlight_dragon [MediaMiner Member] On: December 05, 2006 15:51 CST
Comment/Review:
Where is the rest? Is this 1pov or 3pov style? Your writing could use a little bit of embelishment, but your plot is sound. How would everyone react? I think Goku gave in a bit to easily. Even if you factor the biological thing in he should have put up a bit more a fight. Then again maybe he'll lull Vegeta into false sense of security, he's not as stupid as he appears to be. Please tell me there'll be a really graphic lemon in this?
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