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Reviewed By: TheAlmightyAya-sama [MediaMiner Member] On: March 31, 2005 18:51 CST
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I love this story, I was so glad to read that you were writing this when I got to the end of it's prequel. You are doing a very good job, I hope to see another chapter up soon! This is kag/sess, right? That's who Id pick if I were her. lol.
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Reviewed By: Inu_Girl17 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 26, 2005 15:39 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a great fic!!!!Update soon!!!!!=^.^=
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Reviewed By: InusGirlD [MediaMiner Member] On: March 24, 2005 23:24 CST
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I'm loving it so far :D It's awsome-ness :P Is Sango gonna get to beat up InuYasha? :P Anywhoo please update soon ^^
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Title: Not Bad
Reviewed By: Big Bad Wolf On: March 18, 2005 02:53 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
For your first attempt at writing a Inuyasha Fanfiction your are doing a very good job. There is just one thing I might suggest in your summary you have this as a sort of love triangle with Seeshomaru/Kagome/Inuyasha but when I read your material all I see is Sesshomaru and Kagome there is nothing in your writing that really makes this much of a triangle. I also see more of a relationship development between Inuyasha & Sango then Kagome & Inuyasha. So when I read a Triangle which are my favorites stories I need to see Conflicting emotions from the person trying to choose in your case it is Kagome but with your writing right now the chemistry is Kagome & Seeshomaru making the triangle quite unbelieviable. I await your next chapter in hopes that maybe I will start seeing more Chemistry From Inuyasha & Kagome to make it more believable but I am afraid that after 11-12 chapters there isn't even a triangle leads me to believe that there won't be one. Ja Ne.
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Title: sesshyz koiishi
Reviewed By: sesshyz koiishi [MediaMiner Member] On: March 16, 2005 01:45 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
great updates...but why a love triangle?! i like Kagome and Sesshomaru better together! anyway, they looks so cute/hot together
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Reviewed By: shadowwolf_02 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 15, 2005 10:52 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
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very good fanfic. it really keeps my interest and im looking forward to ready the next chapters. personally i think kags shouldn't have to chose between the brothers...mate her to both! but thats just my personal opinion! keep up the wonderful writing!
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Reviewed By: inuyashasgirlforever (not logged in) On: March 01, 2005 20:50 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OH COME ON YOU CANNOT BE SERIOUS. that is one evil cliff hanger, that and you havent added a chapter in like a long time. EVIL i tell you EVIL, evil but good ofcourse.
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Reviewed By: Celestial Fox [MediaMiner Member] On: February 28, 2005 21:01 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Was this whole chapter a dream?? Like how Miroku chose Sejitsu instead of Sango?? I'm confused! Great story so far! Update soon!
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Reviewed By: ashtonreed [MediaMiner Member] On: February 14, 2005 23:59 CST
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Ok whats with that? They share a warm fuzzy moment only for Sesshy to give up on her. If he was going to just give up, why would he wait so long? And who was in the bushes watching them, hmmm??? But I do love te story, youre doing a great job.
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Title: AWESOMNESS
Reviewed By: hobbitfancier77 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 14, 2005 21:11 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMg....this is so awesome...it brought me to tears to hear that rin died. however shippo and rin as a married couple made me smile again. im loving this fic and ic ant wait to read more..update soon
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Title: YEA!
Reviewed By: jinnandtonic23 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 14, 2005 19:32 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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Fabulous! I was excited when I found out that there would be a sequel to SF's story and I'm happy to say that I'm not disappointed. This is just as good as the first story. You're a great writer and my only suggestion is to watch out for some word usage like 'than/then' Sometimes the two get mixed up. Other than that, awesome work and I eagerly await the next chapter! Arigato!
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Title: DUDE
Reviewed By: icyjade [MediaMiner Member] On: February 10, 2005 00:15 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Dude, no, YOU'RE the bestest friend ever! I love tearing apart your chapters! Now if only I would finish a chapter for you to read.....Anyway, we're both insane, don't kid yourself :-) Your story is turning out wonderfully, and you should totally keep up the good work! Gandalf also thinks you're doing a good job (at least I think that's what he meant by "meow!").
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Reviewed By: Nina Sakadiri On: January 19, 2005 19:11 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey, I love ur story so far! i was wondering...this is a sess/kag fanfic right? teehee just to make sure... i have a suggestion, maybe you could put alittle bit humor into it? you have alots of humor now, but it couldn't hurt to put more, would it? ^_^ you can put more if you want.
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Title: augielove
Reviewed By: augielove [MediaMiner Member] On: January 15, 2005 03:05 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Sorry, I hit enter before I could review. I'm curious about "the truth about Rin". It's kind of funny, both think kag'll choose the other. I can't wait for your next updat! It would be something having both brothers behave during dinner. Keep up the good work.
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Title: augielove
Reviewed By: augielove [MediaMiner Member] On: January 05, 2005 01:21 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I think it's excellent the way you capture Striking Falcon's fic. One could hardly guess it's written by two different authors! I just love how your fic is going! I'm enjoying myself seeing these two fighting over kag. I personally would choose both; however, if forced, it be sess of course. He's one major league HUNK! Just imagine, someone looking like him in real life?(faint) lol. If only I could make my husband look that way and have his personality.
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