Title: Ahem, *cough*
Reviewed By: thebigW [MediaMiner Member] On: December 27, 2004 11:09 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Err... hi, Inu miko. thebigW here. Umm, well let me first say that I read this because you invited me to in your review of one of my stories on another site. I'll admit that I'm a bit conflicted because, umm, while one part of me (the guy part) enjoyed your fic, the other part of me is kind of astonished that someone as young as you (and I only know what you've told us in your profile) can write with such sensuality. From a technical perspective, you have a few spelling errors and there is a minor plot hole where I don't believe Sess would have let her escape that easily, once he was aroused by her. So, ehh, is this what girls daydream about when they should be listening to the english teacher drone on about past participles and such? Anyway, please continue. Your writing will only get better. If you have any email editor (Yahoo, Outlook, etc.) there should be a free spell-check utility built in. Good luck. And don't you dare peek at any of my stuff on this site until you're much, much older! =^,^= W.
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