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| "Kagome and Inuyasha's First date in Feudal Japan" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] | Reviewed By: Inu-Kag15 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 03, 2005 00:39 CDT
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It was super cute, the whole date thing was fluffy all over, I love how you made Inuyasha so shy when he asked her if she wanted to have a date in the first place, and when he gave her the necklace...but I have one question though, where did he get all the money to pay for it?
| Reviewed By: blackice3036 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 19, 2005 17:07 CDT
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Wow...CHAPTER 2 PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
| Reviewed By: MyogaM34 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 21, 2005 14:00 CST
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I loved it!! pLEASE CONTINUE!!!
| Reviewed By: SilentDreamer [MediaMiner Member] On: January 20, 2005 21:24 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
I enjoyed the story a lot but you really do need to work on your gammar and try not to rush it so much.I know it could have been a lot better then that if you didn't. Your Creativity I thought was really good...but, although I do really like the positions you used, you also used them in some other things of yours I've read and although you may have had a reason for using them again I don't know, but you should probably try to think of some other things to put in there. Anyway, you also need to work on the way you word things (that kind of goes along with the grammar thing)your main probablem there, I think, is that you have a tendancy to repeat your self or just say things that aren't really nessecary. You also need to work a little more on putting more enthises on enthuses on the emotions...not nessecarily using more words to get the afect but words that have stronger meanings. Other than that I think it was really good, and I hope you continue the story or at least write other things that I can read. Love, SilentDreamer
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