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| "Revenge" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] | Reviewed By: Mononoke [MediaMiner Member] On: December 15, 2006 17:58 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yeah, the story is a bit cliche but I liked the twists you had in it. Relena wasn't just a bitch, she wasn't just being cruel for the sake of it. I liked this fic, it was well written and nicely done. The end could have used a bit more "oomph", it kinda just went "Oh fuck, it's the end". So, maybe if you were to spice it up, there wouldn't be a need for the second chapter.
| Reviewed By: Nita-sama [MediaMiner Member] On: July 08, 2005 07:04 CDT
Comment/Review:
Hell ya! Right the other chapter!!!
| Reviewed By: Sivy [MediaMiner Member] On: January 12, 2005 04:14 CST
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I am a bit curious what has happend afterwards, but I guess it is okay as isIt might be better if you put this into a story, you probably oculd make it into a school fic, Duo just coming in from somewhere, new kid in school and put in all sorts of plot and how Duo and Heero became friends then lovers and all the while how Relena felt about it... a lot of owrk though but as I said before, its good as is
| Reviewed By: Heart of Warrior [MediaMiner Member] On: January 08, 2005 19:32 CST
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Keep it going! Heero needs to visit him and teach him what it really means to make love.
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