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| "My Last Breath" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Reviewed By: shivalatina [MediaMiner Member] On: June 06, 2006 07:31 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
This is beautiful. I was almost in tears. Nice job
| Reviewed By: brucesgirl [MediaMiner Member] On: February 10, 2006 20:35 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey! Everything was great up until the point that Vegeta started crying. I'm a big DBZ/GT fan, and it kinda bugged me that he just started bawling. I mean, if it's supposed to OOC, that's a different story, but Vegeta only cried twice in the ENTIRE Dragonball series. One was for himself and two was for Mirai when he died. The formatting was a little odd for me, but I could deal with it. It's much easier to read a fiction when it's in spaced paragraphs instead of sentences. It did add to the dream like state of the both of them during the encounter. I love your abilities to describe what's going on, and the POV of the characters is very crisp and clear. And of course, great lemon! All in all, it was a great story, but I might have enjoyed it a little more if Vegeta hadn't bawled so much.
| Reviewed By: 5419616 On: August 11, 2005 23:33 CDT
Comment/Review:
I never knew that song was so hot. That was beautiful.
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