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Reviewed By: madosie [MediaMiner Member] On: August 10, 2006 17:11 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Aye de mi! Quite the smoking little Rendezvous. I have to admit I loved seeing most of the love proclaimations of Kenshin's part. It's nice to see him as the focus of the passion- very romantic. Great writing. The format looked like it got a little weird which made it a bit difficult to read, but it didn't change the effect of the story. Thanks bunches!
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Reviewed By: milady17 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 07, 2005 16:45 CST
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Very good. I enjoyed reading it. The only other suggestion that has not been henceforth stated is that you might possibly consider dividing the format up more. One large paragraph is hard to read. Otherwise, it was fine! But you might want to consider indenting and using more paragraphs to make it an easier read. Thanks! _Milady17_
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Reviewed By: milady17 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 07, 2005 16:45 CST
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Very good. I enjoyed reading it. The only other suggestion that has not been henceforth stated is that you might possibly consider dividing the format up more. One large paragraph is hard to read. Otherwise, it was fine! But you might want to consider indenting and using more paragraphs to make it an easier read. Thanks! _Milady17_
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Reviewed By: Kenshinlovernamedkim On: August 28, 2005 01:29 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was soooooo hot! I love that you were able to write so discriptively even though English is not your first language! Though I have to say I would have loved to read the actuall intercorse instead of the minastrations. I don't know it it was all of it or not but my computer only showed until Kaoru whimpered out Kenshin's name when she was touching him. Anyway good one-shot!
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Reviewed By: Sahara Storm On: July 14, 2005 14:41 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hi! First, I want to say that I think it's so cool that English isn't your first language, but you still seem to have such an impressive command of it. You use your words really well! Your meaphors and imagery were beautiful, and the idea for the fic in the first place was.......... wow. That was really some hot stuff there! There were a few mistakes, but they sure didn't take away for the overall enjoyment of your piece. Magnificent work! I really must applaud you. Keep it up! ~Sahara
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Reviewed By: KiyoneKage On: June 29, 2005 01:02 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great job. I loved it. I've read good RK fics, but that was good. you need some spell checking, but even i have trouble with the words you misspelled. i'd like to say this...you wrote that really well for having learned English watching tv. I myself didn't but i have learned a lot from tv over my 17 years of life. Don't listen to what those morons that write flames say...you're really good. A few spelling errors never killed anyone...at least no one i knew...heh, well, it may kill some english teachers, and from time to time i'm picky, but i look at my own fics that i have not placed on any site and find the exact same mistakes you have. Good work...i'm running low on characters left to write with...opps, silly me... Uh...good fic. spell check more and read over what you've read. just some advice... it may help, it helps me. Later, Kiyone Kage
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Title: WOWZ
Reviewed By: DJ Inuyasha logged out On: April 11, 2005 23:14 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Dat was DA BEST!!!
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Reviewed By: killsims [MediaMiner Member] On: February 01, 2005 22:01 CST
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In accordance with your earlier note, I would like to make a few suggestions for the improvement of your story. You have a good command of interesting vocabulary, but there are occasional gramarical errors that, like preveous reviewers have noticed, detract slightly from the endulging nature of your piece. I'm no expert, but I do edit fan fiction for a hobby, so if you would like me to go back and fix the few minor problems that exist, please give me your consent via my E-Mail: killsims@yahoo.com, and I will send the edited version to you as soon as I can. Apart from these few mistakes, your story is extremely well written and highly enjoyable to read.
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Reviewed By: shadowfox618 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 27, 2005 09:31 CST
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I loved it lots! And I agree with your note, people shouldn't be mean in they're reveiws, it's just not right. Anyway's keep up the good work! Ja ne! Kiki-chan
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Title: very nice!
Reviewed By: ChaosReborn [MediaMiner Member] On: January 19, 2005 13:18 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wonderfully composed (and quite racy!)... I do, however, have to agree with EvilBunny... asking others to edit your fic would make it even better. All it takes is one litle mistake, and the entire mood would be broken (and trust me... stories like yours NEED to have obsessively protected moods). Other than the occasional stumble, though, this was a great fic (and thankfully NOT OOC)... update soon!
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Title: Ici on parle francais.
Reviewed By: EvilBunny [MediaMiner Member] On: January 12, 2005 23:26 CST
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It's sweet, with a slightly tangy avoirdupois that is only attained through diligent care and perseverance. Did that sound hoity and magazine like? Okay, so my not so secret dream is to become a food critic. I love your work, or what I've seen of it. I can't think of anything to improve upon. The only thing I could suggest would be to let someone proof read for you. I have to say that even the minor word confusion and occasional misspelling do not subtract from the beauty you seem to so effortlessly create.
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