| "Three Words" Reviews/Comments [ 8 ] |
Reviewed By: Miss Shepherdess [MediaMiner Member] On: September 29, 2005 14:30 CDT
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Well that was fun. ^_^ A story with a lesson... Hehe. Perhaps the fic could have started with Heero's POV, or have it present if just a little bit stronger to fit the ending better, but other than that... Very entertaining. :)
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Reviewed By: black beauty On: April 29, 2005 19:49 CDT
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Awww...I'm happy for the happy ending. It made me cry at first, but happy endings are my favourite thing! Keep up the wonderful job!
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Title: Pass the Tissue
Reviewed By: greengal48 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 27, 2005 16:49 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ok. so THAT was a tear jerker. loved every second of it. it was sugar coated but not to the point that it was over-powering. and great job with not making heero have a moment of insanity. (i do believe you know what i mean.) keep it up! i'm lovin' your stories.
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Reviewed By: Shaeric Draconis [MediaMiner Member] On: January 21, 2005 16:29 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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Excellent read. Few minor problems with the format and everything plus spelling but the story was great and I enjoyed it a lot. Keep writing because you had a good plot with this one. I look forward to more of your work.
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Reviewed By: priscel [MediaMiner Member] On: January 17, 2005 08:16 CST
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*whines* the formating has it all centered for both chapters *pouts* Also i've usually seen Miss pink princess' name spelled 'Relena'. So i'm really interested in this story to see how things work out, especially now that Heero has figured out that he can talk to Duo in his sleep... even possibly do more than talk to him if he lies with Duo so that his ghostly form merges with his?!? so umm *looks sheepish* you said there's only one chapter left and it just can't be true!! *pouts* There were less spelling errors! And I'm glad you continued! but only one chapter left *whines*
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Reviewed By: priscel [MediaMiner Member] On: January 11, 2005 14:22 CST
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In my excitement and peaked interest in this story i forgot to metnion this, i have a habit of overlooking the spelling errors and Quat's name should be 'Quatre' to go with whole idea of the pilots names being numbers and all. My 10 rating still stands, with a change to 8 for spelling/grammar. Overall I like it lots! and i hope you continue it!
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Reviewed By: priscel [MediaMiner Member] On: January 11, 2005 14:14 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
nicely done!! So ya know there has to be more!!! Gotta know how he works through it all! I had thought about it yaknow, how lucky the pilots were that almost everytime they finished a mission that every one was usually dead of dying in shock that they couldn't lift a hand to shoot them or anything when they left their gundams to survey the area. Wow... and now here ya go bringing in the possibility, Duo in a life with out heero... angsty stuff here and i say CONTINUE!!! more please!
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Title: Not Bad for 1st fic
Reviewed By: angelchan [MediaMiner Member] On: January 11, 2005 07:46 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Athena, it's ESM. I have to say this is pretty good for a first-time fanfic. There are a good number of misspellings littered throughout it, and "Quatra" is spelled "Quatre"; it's based on the French word for "four". If you don't have a beta reader to help catch stuff, it might be a good idea to enlist one (I know my writing has improved since I got my betas); just make sure you don't get one that's one of the "This is so great" types - they'll ruin your writing faster than any typo. However, for a first-time fanfic, you did a good job. It's not often a first-time author can have me looking around the page for the next chapter button, so good job with the ending. Good luck with your next fanficts! -ESM
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