| "Red Fusion" Reviews/Comments [ 12 ] |
Title: well written
Reviewed By: Brennen_Sie_Drachen [MediaMiner Member] On: April 13, 2006 18:30 CDT
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Its really good, keep writting!
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Title: O.O Awesome!
Reviewed By: MAIDEN OF TIME AND SPACE [MediaMiner Member] On: December 18, 2005 18:42 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was a awesome fic! You made this up yourself!!???? YOU'RE SO GOOD!!! First and second chapter had me so scared, that I ran over to mty lamp and turned the light on. The third chapter made me blush like a tomato. and the fourth also made me scared! You are so good! You're a genuis! GENUIS! And thank you for reading my fic! I had that idea in my head for 5 months. I will update as soon as I can! See ya for now! Update soon!! ^_^ ~kat
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Reviewed By: devildice708 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 13, 2005 17:22 CST
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It still gets to me that Jack and Sume's relationship had to end on such bad terms. To think that he'll never get the chance to say he's sorry...or maybe he will. Who knows? You've got an excellent story on your hands. Keep working on it. Until then...later. ^_^
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Reviewed By: ShadowKano [MediaMiner Member] On: October 15, 2005 18:58 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey I did as you suggested and I'm liking it, but meh -_- don't expect me to do this often but. ::points to rating:: I haven't did one for spelling since my own has a few I'm going to fix. Anywho.....See Ya
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Reviewed By: devildice708(didn't feel like logging in) On: June 09, 2005 21:34 CDT
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Hey, demonicpride. Wherever you are, I hope you never give up on this story. Much love to you and your family and I wish you the best luck. I hope we see each other again, but until then, peace.
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Reviewed By: devildice(didn't feel like logging in) On: April 20, 2005 12:45 CDT
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oh man, i hope that last sentence didn't come out wrong. If your having fun with your fic then that's all that matters when it comes to fics
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Reviewed By: devildice(didn't feel like logging in) On: April 20, 2005 12:36 CDT
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H-ELLO!!! Alright, man. I've seen that you've put some improvements to your story and that's good. One thing that bothers me though...when you're posting chapters, don't put in just incomplete versions instead of the final product. It doesn't feel right. But other than that, this is real good. Just remember, if your not having fun writing this...then there's no point in writing it, period. Later...
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Reviewed By: Broken Visage [MediaMiner Member] On: April 20, 2005 03:03 CDT
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Horrible, horrible thing happened to that review. I meant to say "You should go in and reload your chapters so they are formatted with an empty line between paragraphs," because they are not as it stands now.
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Reviewed By: Broken Visage [MediaMiner Member] On: April 20, 2005 03:01 CDT
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You have several wonderful descriptions, which is always a pleasure to see in fiction. You should go in and reload your chapters so they they were formatted with an empty line between paragraphs. This is more comfortable for readers to read. Excellent spelling and grammar through all three parts you have up. The story itself is unfolding rather nicely. I see some minor problems, though. First, there is no 33" magnum; it would be .33 magnum (though .33 is not a magnum calibre, .357 is). You also might not want to interrupt the story with telling us whose POV we are reading. Just write it all the way through and it'll flow better. I think you have a very good story on your hands. Just keep working hard and always look for improvements. :-)
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Reviewed By: suki_moon_princess [MediaMiner Member] On: February 24, 2005 22:03 CST
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Now, that was a good story. Can't wait for more chapters. I live for horror stories. Not many catch my interest, so consider this a major complement.
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Reviewed By: devildice708 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 24, 2005 10:56 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Now that's what I'm talking about!It's fics like these that make me wanna throw up--which in this case is a good thing. Seriously, can't wait for the next chapter!
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Reviewed By: devildice708 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 11, 2005 12:18 CST
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As a friend--one of your best friends--ITS TOO SHORT!!! I know this is not the final version. When it was in your notebook, it was WAY longer. Do something with this man. i know that this isn't your full potential.
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