| "All Along" Reviews/Comments [ 12 ] |
Reviewed By: Codan On: March 17, 2006 15:14 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Seriously seriously great! You've made a complete mess of Heero's life (I liked the shampoo bit, nice touch) and now you have to fix it, please update soon! ^^
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Reviewed By: Lynhares67 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 09, 2006 06:09 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great fic, update soon please:)
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Reviewed By: Nita-sama [MediaMiner Member] On: March 24, 2005 16:54 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Heero is a real ass in this fic, but I still love it. Update soon!
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Reviewed By: PATTY 40 On: March 03, 2005 18:55 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I loved this .Thanks for writing it so I could read it and enjoy it. Please write more....sorry it took so long to review.
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Reviewed By: Fujinakaheero (not signed in) On: January 31, 2005 16:29 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
You need to fix up some things in your chapters a lot of sentances don't make sense and there is spelling mistakes, in one of your chapters you said "food" but you meant to say "foot" You should read over your stories before posting them, revise them to make sure you got spelling-mistakes and sentances that don't make sense corrected. Really good though as I have said the plot to this is great and remember a good author can never revise enough times to their story.
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Reviewed By: Shaeric Draconis [MediaMiner Member] On: January 28, 2005 17:22 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Ah nothing like come-uppance turning around and biting you in the ass. Poor Duo *huggles him* Poor Heero *no hugs from me* heh. I love this and I'm looking forward to the next chapter. I like Relena in this, she was hurt but understanding and I like the way she stuck up for Duo.
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Reviewed By: Kogas Hentai Luver [MediaMiner Member] On: January 26, 2005 22:42 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Really great story. I can't for to see how Duo and Heero will work things out. I'm hoping for romantic lemon in the end.
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Reviewed By: PATTY 40 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 21, 2005 19:29 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really enjoyed this story and hope you update again soon.
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Title: Good start!
Reviewed By: Pyrzm not signed in On: January 20, 2005 18:17 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
For a first time story this is coming along well. Heero is a real bastard, though, as you state up front. Makes me wonder how you're going to turn that around. Should be interesting. Some technical nitpicks. If you want to show that someone is shouting, please don't use ALL CAPS! Very unprofessional. Instead, do something like "Get out here, Duo you baka!" he yelled. Or he yelled angrily, if you want. But we should be able to tell the mood by word choice and punctuation. Oh, and never use !!. One is plenty. Word choice: You have a lot of words here that are spelled correctly, and sound right, but are the wrong word. You use "seamed" a lot, when you mean "seemed", "waste" for "waist" etc. These are called homonyms (sound alikes) and spell checkers often won't catch those for you.
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Reviewed By: DESIRED faith On: January 17, 2005 15:32 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Comment/Review:
Interesting story so far. You should definately continue it with more chapters. :)
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Title: Great Job
Reviewed By: Kogas Hentai Luver [MediaMiner Member] On: January 17, 2005 00:34 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You should absolutely continue. You did a wonderful job for your first fic. You go right ahead and take a bow, K ^_~ I'll look forward to the next chapter. Good Luck
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Reviewed By: fujinakaheero (not signed in) On: January 16, 2005 13:21 CST
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Comment/Review:
Um not a bad story though you need to look over your work and correct your sentances and spelling mistakes 'cause somethings don't make sense. Also Relina's name is spelt Relena and when you first mentioned her as Mrs Peacecrafter it should actually be MS. Peacecrafter because she's not married and when you put Mrs infront of someone's name it means that they are married. So I thought u might want to fix some of these things up. Not bad story and plot though. I'll be waiting for your next chapter. JA NE!
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