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| "Digiquest for Glory: So You Want to Be a Hero" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] | Reviewed By: Kaeera [MediaMiner Member] On: April 20, 2002 14:20 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story starts interesting...I will read the next parts as soon as possible*smiles* Hey, it's funny, the name Spielburg...is it really used in the game? Because I am German, and this name sounds ood. Literally translated, it would mean 'Playtown' or something like that. There's a branch which produces games, and it's called like that....ehehehehe...funny^^ | Reviewed By: Kaeera [MediaMiner Member] On: April 21, 2002 14:51 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Okay, now I've read everything so far. There was one particular thing I disliked: the fights. I know that you write about a game...but the fights are just way to easy. It's like: Oh, a big ebil guy, I will just draw my sword and kill him.
In reality, you would have to fight more. It's exhausting. You get hurt easily. And two sword fighters won't win against numerous enemies. Of course, it's stupid talking of 'real' life here....and they have a wizard in their group, but still....they whole story is nice, I like the writing, I like the characters and the whole idea. But the fighting scenes....please try to make it realistic. Let them be hurt. Or they have to gasp for breath. Maybe they even try to run away....or they are SCARED! I don't believe that they are that courageous. Just involve more insight, more feelings of the characters, and then the story will be perfect.
Uhm, I hope I didn't offend you. This is my honest opinion...when I reviewed the first time, I just had read the first chapter, and I reviewed mainly because I wanted to comment the name 'Spielburg'. Because of this, my rating went down now. The enjoyment factor is lower because the fights are boring. You just know that they will win...it isn't exciting. You don't fear for their lives. Heck, they themselves don't fear for their lives...
My suggestion: imagine what you would do in such a situiation. Imagine the feeling you would feel when you had to fight against some monsters. And then write it down... | Reviewed By: D-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: December 19, 2001 12:53 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
My, I've been runing into some great fics the past few days and yours is no exception. I'm not a huge Digimon fan, but I like the series and with the little knowledge I have, I was able to follow what've I've read so far.
I gave you straight tens, but I think you've earned them. Erg, I'm sorry I couldn't find anything wrong with your fic - although that's not a bad thing. :)
On a side note, I found this part extremely funny:
“NO ONE EVER SAID WE’D HAVE TO FREEZE TO DEATH!” shouted Daisuke. He ignored Takeru and Yamato’s frantic attempts to get him to lower his voice. “I’M COLD AND I’M HUNGRY AND I WANT A NICE WARM BED AND BATH!!!!”
Takeru cringed as he heard a loud rumble. He looked behind them. “Run! Avalanche!”
They ran for their lives as the snow began to slide down the mountain. Rocks followed adding to the ruckus. None of them looked behind, just ahead to what looked like a forest. RUMBLE! CRASH!
::shrugs:: I enjoy classic humor. Anyway, great fic!
~D-chan
Email: AlloraColleen@aol.com | Reviewed By: Umi-chan On: November 07, 2001 16:59 CST
Comment/Review:
This sounds really interesting! I love fics that are series in themselves! I wish you the best of luck with this and I'll just let you know that I'll be reading it along the way! Your rating and spot in the top 15 is well-deserved. I don't watch Digimon, so I hope you give good representations of the characters and whatnot. Well, here's to good fics!
~Umi-chan |
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