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Reviewed By: PerpetualBlueSky [MediaMiner Member] On: May 13, 2005 21:27 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, very interesting. I'm captivated! -P. Blue
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Title: A New Dream, A New Destiny
Reviewed By: Kaggy-chan2202 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 12, 2005 17:45 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It was amazing!!! Hey don't listen to that Chinstrap person ok?! She is wrong!!!! Your story is plenty orignal!!! He/She needs to keep that shit personal!!! So please do continue ok??!! That is an order soldier!!! Lol just kiddin!!! Hey next time someone talks shit like that use the flames to make something worthwhile like oden!!! Ja ne and please update cause I really ejoyed this fic!!!
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Title: Review, continued
Reviewed By: Chinstrap [MediaMiner Member] On: May 12, 2005 15:06 EDT
Comment/Review:
As for the overall story... ::sighs:: Look, it's obvious that you're an adult, and you're better than 90% of the fanauthors in this fandom. You can spell. You know what a full-stop is. You can format dialogue correctly. Regardless of that, however, this story is lacking the one thing that truly makes reading worthwhile: originality. I can't count the number of Synchronized Sex Dream plots I've seen (and Kagome waking up with a hickey is eerily reminiscent of Volpa's TMWI, wherein Kagome awakens with a bite mark after a dream about Sesshoumaru.) I can't count the number of Kagome Gets Transferred to the Same School as [Insert Bishounen's Name Here] plots. And the sheer amount of Shuichi's Fanclub Hates Kagome and Makes Her Life Hell fics is overwhelming. If you're going to all the effort to write the story, you might as well come up with something original (and believable. Originality doesn't automatically make a story good, as many an insane crossover story has proven.) It would be nice to see an author who follows the rules of grammar come up with an original, interesting plot for once. Oh, and one last thing: you've gotten the avatar aspect backwards. Shuichi is the avatar; Youko is the kitsune. I'd hate to see that mixup catch on and start showing up in dozens of other authors' stories.
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Reviewed By: Chinstrap [MediaMiner Member] On: May 12, 2005 15:03 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 3 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 3 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
Out of the thousands of Inuyasha fanfictions out there, only a scant few bother to get the Japanese school system right. The authors usually just stick the characters in an American school and say that it's Japanese. I chalk it up to ignorance; these authors are young, and they don't know any better. It's refreshing to come across a fic where the author actually gets the Japanese school system right. So why, in the name of all that's holy, would you Americanize the school when you obviously know better? Why would the Japanese even WANT to imitate American schools when their students consistently score much higher? (For example, on 8th grade math scores, Japan ranks fifth among industrialized nations, and the US is 19th.) It makes absolutely no sense at all. If it ever did happen, parents would be pulling their kids out of that school so fast that the teachers and administrators would be unemployed within a week. The exit exams and college entrance exams are standardized nationally; who would want their child to have to compete with students at other schools, where the system has been proven to work better? Perhaps you're doing this to facilitate some strange plot device with the cliche Shuichi Fan Club, but it's coming across as far too heavy-handed and entirely unbelievable. Please, you obviously know better. You're only contributing to the ignorance of the vast amounts of fans who think that the entire world is just like the US (or wants to be just like the US.) (TBC...)
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Title: Ahh
Reviewed By: Fox Vixen [MediaMiner Member] On: May 12, 2005 15:02 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Update loved it so update.
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Reviewed By: kagome15 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 11, 2005 21:41 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
PLEASE UPDATE ASAP!!!! GREAT STORY TOO!!!!!! ^_^
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Reviewed By: TheAlmightyAya-sama! (too lazy to log in...) On: May 11, 2005 20:15 EDT
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Oh, this is quite good! please write more, I LOVE kag/kur fics. I have to say good job on not using "netspeak" Ive been running into too many authors that dont go through the trouble of writing properly and you are one of those nice authors that ot only uses full sentences, but also writes a good, interesting, story! I hope to see more soon!
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Reviewed By: katiepatie [MediaMiner Member] On: May 11, 2005 18:59 EDT
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i love it! ^-^ please update soon!
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Reviewed By: grapejellybean [MediaMiner Member] On: May 11, 2005 10:45 EDT
Comment/Review:
I'm so happy to hear that you have decided to continue this story. It has so much potential. Can't wait until there is more. Keep up the hard work1
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Reviewed By: Ryukotsusei [MediaMiner Member] On: May 11, 2005 10:16 EDT
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I think it's wonderful that you have decided to continue this story. It's an awesome start and I can't wait to read more. I'm glad that Youko seems to have a more serious side to him as well. Please update soon.
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Title: A New Dream, A New Destiny
Reviewed By: Megan Consoer [MediaMiner Member] On: March 26, 2005 22:19 EST
Comment/Review:
I really like this story alot. Can you write some more chapters? Can the pairing be Kurama, Hiei, and Kagome please.
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Title: A New Dream, A New Destiny
Reviewed By: Megan Consoer [MediaMiner Member] On: March 07, 2005 19:48 EST
Comment/Review:
I really like this story alot. Can you write some more chapters?
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Reviewed By: Richy-Chan101 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 21, 2005 20:19 EST
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that was sooooo good. the way you introduced it and the way you had them meet, it was great!!! I think you should right this story a couple more chapters or so, mabe go into some detail or something, i dunno. all i knoe is that i love this story and it's plot and you need to keep it going!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: Ryukotsusei [MediaMiner Member] On: January 21, 2005 19:59 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
great one shot, it has good potential for a full fic if you decide to update it.
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Reviewed By: digger [MediaMiner Member] On: January 21, 2005 15:27 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This has the potential to be one hell of an epic if you just continue start updating. I will be waiting.
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