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Title: Surprised again!
Reviewed By: other_hitomi [MediaMiner Member] On: February 03, 2005 16:09 CST
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Wow! My guess of what Kagome's surprise was going to be was totally wrong. That's great--I love it when a story does something I don't expect, because it shows that the writer isn't following the same old plots. Keep up the good work!
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Reviewed By: w_j [MediaMiner Member] On: February 03, 2005 00:01 CST
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Thanks for updating your story. I liked the new chapters and I look forward to reading more soon.
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Reviewed By: w_j [MediaMiner Member] On: February 01, 2005 15:07 CST
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I really like your story. You write well and have an interesting plot and I hope you update soon. Thanks!
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Reviewed By: other_hitomi [MediaMiner Member] On: February 01, 2005 11:24 CST
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Well, that's interesting. I've been having a feeling for some time that I knew what Kagome's "surprise" was going to be, and now I'm pretty sure that I was right. I'm not sure why she didn't just tell Inuyasha right away, though.
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Title: Nice Start
Reviewed By: Sabichan [MediaMiner Member] On: January 27, 2005 03:31 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Okay...I'm interested ^_^ I like the disclaimer you wrote before the chapter-very thorough. Anywho, I like the idea and I can tell I'll like where this is going. I like your analyzation of Kagome's emotions, and that she realized that what she'd done was both childish and reckless-that shows great characterization. I like the way you also keep Inuyasha in character as well-a hard job (qouth the AU addict). If I may offer a suggestion...asterisks are great for breaking up scenes. For instance, the scene near the end where Kagome tries to jump back down into the well was a tad confusing because it immediately jumped to a scene not only on the Feudal era side of the well, but a whole month later. Honest to goodness though, I did enjoy this first chapter. Its a very nice start to what I'm sure will be a good story. I'll be waiting for the next chap! By the way, your summary is what drew me in-nice job! ^_^ Feel free to contact me if you need any help (technical or story-wise), queenynell@aol.com. Thanks for writing! ~Sabichan~
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