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Title: Prinsess_serenity59 (nsi)
Reviewed By: prinsess_serenity59 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 08, 2005 17:53 CST
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I really like this story its so creative but hitomi has got a point bout the shippo thing your good with spelling mistakes and its cool how you thought of making the micheal thing the inuyasha thing and the paul thing work I love your story keep on writing and dont feel to rushed dont let anything get you thinking your story sucks or anything your story is great dont think other wise luv ya hun Randi~
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Reviewed By: other_hitomi [MediaMiner Member] On: February 08, 2005 15:14 CST
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Great! I love Kagome's new reaction to Miroku's groping--much better than just screaming and jumping away. I see that Shippo wants to be useful, but shouldn't it be impossible for him to hold Tetsusaiga, since he's a demon? Those protein bars are usually terrible tasting--I completely understand Shippo's reaction, and I almost wonder if Michael's put something in them to help him control Kagome, since it's entirely possible to be a vegetarian without eating anything like that. And I think drugs are the only explanation for someone liking those things. :)
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Reviewed By: w_j [MediaMiner Member] On: February 08, 2005 13:38 CST
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Well, I just thought Michael the \"angel\" was sorta creepy before, but now I officially hate him for doing that to Kagome and for hurting Shippou with that charm. You know, Satan was once an angel too... Please update soon. Thanks! ----wj
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Reviewed By: w_j [MediaMiner Member] On: February 08, 2005 13:37 CST
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Well, I just thought Michael the \"angel\" was sorta creepy before, but now I officially hate him for doing that to Kagome and for hurting Shippou with that charm. You know, Satan was once an angel too... Please update soon. Thanks! ----wj
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Reviewed By: w_j [MediaMiner Member] On: February 07, 2005 16:29 CST
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"If Kagome feels threatened, angered, or frightened in the least by any demon, this charm creates a barrier around her no demon can penetrate." --quote from Micheal ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I went back and read that again and I suddenly realized that Kagome can't hold Shippou during a battle or save him if they are being threatened by another demon. And Inuyasha and Kirara will not be able to pick her up and carry out of harm's way like they always do. This necklace Micheal gave Kagome will endanger all her friends because "no demon can penetrate" the barrier when she feels threatened, and that means Shippou, Inuyasha, and Kirara won't be able to get near her to help her or receive help from her during a battle since she would natually feel threatened by the demon that is attacking them. What will happen? Please update soon!
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Reviewed By: w_j [MediaMiner Member] On: February 07, 2005 15:56 CST
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I am still liking your story and I really like the fact that you update so often. Please keep going! Thanks!
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Title: Again, wow!
Reviewed By: other_hitomi [MediaMiner Member] On: February 07, 2005 15:19 CST
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Well, I really hope that you want me to hate Michael, because I sure do. I'd been thinking that he was a manipulative, overcontrolling, creepy jerk, and his actions in the last couple of chapters have proved that. If that's not what you were aiming for, you might want to rethink how you're writing this story.
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Reviewed By: w_j [MediaMiner Member] On: February 06, 2005 01:41 CST
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You have a very good story. You write well and you are keeping Kagome and Inuyasha believable and as in-character as possible given the circumstances. Post another chapter soon, please. Thanks!
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Reviewed By: w_j [MediaMiner Member] On: February 05, 2005 17:23 CST
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I'm glad you update so often. I'm still really liking your story and I can't wait to read more. Thanks!
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Reviewed By: w_j [MediaMiner Member] On: February 04, 2005 00:29 CST
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Thank you for updating! You've written a really good story so far and hope you update again soon.
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Title: Surprised again!
Reviewed By: other_hitomi [MediaMiner Member] On: February 03, 2005 16:09 CST
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Wow! My guess of what Kagome's surprise was going to be was totally wrong. That's great--I love it when a story does something I don't expect, because it shows that the writer isn't following the same old plots. Keep up the good work!
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Reviewed By: w_j [MediaMiner Member] On: February 03, 2005 00:01 CST
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Thanks for updating your story. I liked the new chapters and I look forward to reading more soon.
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Reviewed By: w_j [MediaMiner Member] On: February 01, 2005 15:07 CST
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I really like your story. You write well and have an interesting plot and I hope you update soon. Thanks!
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Reviewed By: other_hitomi [MediaMiner Member] On: February 01, 2005 11:24 CST
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Well, that's interesting. I've been having a feeling for some time that I knew what Kagome's "surprise" was going to be, and now I'm pretty sure that I was right. I'm not sure why she didn't just tell Inuyasha right away, though.
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Title: Nice Start
Reviewed By: Sabichan [MediaMiner Member] On: January 27, 2005 03:31 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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Okay...I'm interested ^_^ I like the disclaimer you wrote before the chapter-very thorough. Anywho, I like the idea and I can tell I'll like where this is going. I like your analyzation of Kagome's emotions, and that she realized that what she'd done was both childish and reckless-that shows great characterization. I like the way you also keep Inuyasha in character as well-a hard job (qouth the AU addict). If I may offer a suggestion...asterisks are great for breaking up scenes. For instance, the scene near the end where Kagome tries to jump back down into the well was a tad confusing because it immediately jumped to a scene not only on the Feudal era side of the well, but a whole month later. Honest to goodness though, I did enjoy this first chapter. Its a very nice start to what I'm sure will be a good story. I'll be waiting for the next chap! By the way, your summary is what drew me in-nice job! ^_^ Feel free to contact me if you need any help (technical or story-wise), queenynell@aol.com. Thanks for writing! ~Sabichan~
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