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| "Indolentia" Reviews/Comments [ 24 ] | | Pages (2): [ 1 2 › » ] | Title: Hoping it is fixed soon
Reviewed By: Inu Hanyou Nikkie NSI On: January 31, 2008 08:35 CST
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Okay.. you have done good on Chapters 1,2,4,5,9,10,13,16,17,19.. you presented your story in such a wonderful way.. So pleasing and 'want to read more'.. then your formatting went right down hill... It's just a giant blob of words for Chapters 3,6,7,8,11,12,14,15,18,.. it feels like you don't care enough about your story to fix it. My pleasure in the story went away as well (a story is like a person - they too need to be presentable to public). You had started off so well too. I can only hope that you would fix the story to make it better.. I wouldn't mind giving this a second chance to read.
| Title: Update
Reviewed By: PunkAngel7 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 27, 2005 13:37 CDT
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Update very soon PLZ
| Reviewed By: Washuu Ogami On: April 06, 2005 08:00 CDT
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Just dropped by to re-read,and hope for updates (alas, none :( ) Thanks for what you've posted so far--extremely enjoyable!! :)
| Reviewed By: Namelss nonsigned in girl On: March 26, 2005 13:51 CST
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Wonderful. I love your reasoning for her never becoming a normal woman. Oh, and don't bring a lemon too soon, that would kinda be uncomfortable for the story...don't make it go too quickly. ^_~ Gimme a nice, long chappy next time, kay?
| Reviewed By: Noname not signed in Girl On: March 26, 2005 12:42 CST
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Hehehe, that's great. I didn't think demons could become drunk so quickly ^_~ That's funny! Keep it up!
| Reviewed By: The same no name not signed in girl On: March 26, 2005 12:31 CST
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I've noticed that you often say Kaed's instead of Kaede's. Whether it is a just a spelling error or if that is the way you always spell her name, I'm not sure. But, just so you know. Kaede's. Try to remember. Really really nice story you have here. You are a splendid writer and your format here is easy and comfortable to read. Good job, keep it up.
| Reviewed By: The nonamed nonsigned in girl On: March 26, 2005 12:05 CST
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Really great. Although you missed a few punctuations that made it kinda confusing. And there were a few spelling errors and letters that needed to be capitalized to make it look neater. Other than that, you are a really great writer and deserve all the reviews you are going to get! ^_~
| Reviewed By: Zirra Nova [MediaMiner Member] On: March 26, 2005 09:40 CST
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that was sjort but sad very sad, kikyo isnt the horrible person so many people hate she just a very confusing character, i personaly don't hate her but i dont love yet you made me feel so sorry for her. your a very good author and hopefully youll hurry and update...:D Zirra
| Title: Chapter 13
Reviewed By: Washuu Ogami On: March 25, 2005 22:13 CST
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Short chapter, but fraught with such emotion...and a possible clue to the Shikon no Tama's healing factor that could be of benefit to Inuyasha. But, was he so lost in the morass of spiraling grief that her cryptic words were lost upon our beloved hanyou? And I was stricken by Kikyou's second passing, and Inuyasha's unheeded call to her--as ever, though he sees this not; their paths had diverged long,long before...beautiful, so tenderly written; arigatou gozemaisu.
| Title: awww....
Reviewed By: InuYashasLoveLorn [MediaMiner Member] On: March 25, 2005 22:03 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
awww.... that's the nicest way i've read Kikyo letting go of InuYasha well keep up the good work and update again soon please?
| Reviewed By: Zirra Nova [MediaMiner Member] On: March 23, 2005 15:10 CST
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Noooooo, it ended darn i was hoping it would go on and on. oh well great so far can't wait for a new chappy, see ya. Zirra
| Title: Chapter 12
Reviewed By: Washuu Ogami On: March 23, 2005 06:53 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wonderful, restrained affection and supportive bond that washes back and forth instinctively between Kagome and Inuyasha, the entire group. Shippou is his playful self as always...nicely characterized,as were the previous chapters. Yes, you are making the readers "suffer" re:I/K finally coming clean. I'd also appreciated the peaceful resolution to Kikyou's fate; she was dealt a bad hand in life...and reanimation, though took her awhile--and Kagome's overwhelmingly positive influence--to overcome these. Ooooo, foreshadowing; Kagome, what have you done, what not addressed from your wish? Reading this story whilst listening to apropos Inuyasha tracks intensifies the episodic air of your writing. :) Nice job!Looking fwd to more upon your return...healthy and as whole as is possible.--Washuu Hanyou
| Reviewed By: Washuu Hanyou [MediaMiner Member] On: March 17, 2005 12:47 CST
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What a poignant chapter, and a nice reversal where Kagome's sleeping with her head on Inuyasha's lap; very sweet. (but...will he ever tell or indisputably demonstrate to her--never mind; author's prerogative, but you are aware you're killing your readers w/the suspense by inches, right? LOL) Every word, line screams "episode!"--thank you for that authentic feel reverberating off the pages. Sango, Miroku, Shippou--ah, love this. Best wishes for surmounting upcoming medical difficulties--you'll make it, you'll be strong. :)
| Reviewed By: IdiotGirl222 (not signed in) On: March 16, 2005 22:06 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Its a great story I really hope to read more soon! Keep up the great work!
| Title: wow...
Reviewed By: InuYashasLoveLorn (nsi sry) On: March 16, 2005 21:05 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
what are you getting surgery for? well anywho i loved the update keep up the good work and update when you can! ^____^
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