Reviewed By: Umi-chan On: October 28, 2001 13:01 CST
Comment/Review:
Before I actually read read this (yeah...anywho..) I'd just like to say that you need to format better. Paragraphs! And going from single to doube (or 1.5, not sure) in the middle of a chapter is strange. Also, maybe make this two chapters? It just would be easier as this is pretty long.[ Request Review Removal ] |
